VERY NICE. MYSTERIOUS...BUT IT HAS POTENTIAL. THANX FOR REVIEWING MY STORY.

I'M PLANNING ON A SEQUEL, BUT I HAVEN'T HAD MUCH TIME TO WRITE IT.

*shiverness* Oh... Creepy...

Well, thanks, MC, now I'm gonna have nightmares! Ah, well. Nothing a little Toby Keith can't fix. ^^

A theme I've noticed running through a lot of your work is a severe dislike of the character 'you'. Does 'you' exist, or is he/she a figment of your imagination?

Overall a very thought provoking poem!!

Brilliant!! 5 out of five thumbs up!!

COOL! Kinda haunting - tres cool.

Horrifying with darkness and innocence intermingly simultaneously. I like it but I find some lines a bit too cliche. In my eyes it's a bit too cliche but that's just me.

Like when 'she said in horror' 'she said confudedly'. I think you outta expand on that. The dailogue was awesome no doubt about it but like the text there could be a little more meat.

But I like your style, nice.

- ShadowEver