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Reviews For: Flexibility

Atsu 2007-11-01 ch 1,	abuseOh. I'm entranced! That was so cool. Sorry, I'm in throws of joy from reading it, so 'm not really coherent! Hmm, let's see. I loved the point of view, and the tone. Just everything, really. Loved it, loved it, loved it!
magalina 2007-07-19 ch 1,	abuseLoved it, especially the ending. Amazing work :D
Butler 2006-02-05 ch 1, anon.	abuseSo I’m getting to this after such a long time, and I can’t even believe that because I’ve read this a hell of a lot of times. But really, every time I’d end up with a ‘…’ and nothing to say but “WOW.” or babbling. And I figured that somehow that wouldn’t be right with the world if I just wrote one word in this little review box. Because this piece deserves more like a million. I’ll try to meet that mark, but you’ll have to forgive me if I fall just a little short. Maybe 9,9 is a more reasonable number? ;-) There were so many parts in this that were just quotable, so let me go through it from start to finish: [The moments, the seconds… Maybe you’re just teasing yourself. You always liked that. You always felt the temperature soar when what you wanted was just out of reach.] Wow, I love that because it shows how his character is. He’s not one of those people who pity themselves because something they want is out of reach. He’s one of those people who enjoys the chase and the hunt, who revels in the feel of it being far away because he knows that it won’t always be far away. He almost feels a little sado (to me), but I think that’s what makes him even more interesting. [Sometimes he gives you a dark-eyed stare that makes you feel a little strained inside. But he’s always the first to look away.] I just really like the ‘makes you feel a little strained inside’ because that sounds raw and realistic. I think I might have felt a little of that, before, too. And I like the fact that ‘he’s always the first to look away.’ Talk about a game. [Their lips melded together under the rain, hands slicking down the wet clothes they wore. They clung to each other, feverish and intense, open mouths gasping for each other’s breath. Breathing each other’s air. And he was backed against the doorway, arms above his head, as the boy’s thin fingers rolled the wet shirt up his chest.] // [His mouth opened wide in a gasp. His shirt hit the ground, and the rain fell on his bare chest. The boy was kissing down his body, his tongue licking droplets of rain off his nipples, following more down the hard lines of his pecs. And you felt your body grow warm, the feeling below your stomach growing tighter; almost an ache.] Uh…guh? Yeah, holy, holy, holy hell. That’s friggin’ gorgeous. And sexy. Because…just, yeah. [So you let go of the fence and made a run for it, barely making it to your house before you came. Still biting your lip.] That’s powerful. [The next day, you were knocked into a second floor locker, but you were the first to look away. You felt eyes on you all the way down the hall.] Oh, I love the hidden meaning in this bit. And the ‘but you were the first to look away.’ [A couple minutes later, he comes back with the coffee. Cup, saucer, cream, and pot; all white as eggshells.] Something about the ‘white as eggshells’ part caught my attention. I always like the little details that seem to be forgettable but aren’t really. And there was something about that that stuck in my head. If I were in a symbolism class, I’d spout something lame about it all, but I’ll save you that. [“Know what… when’s your next break?” You interested? // He smiles, looking over his shoulder at the kitchen. “I was just about to take one, actually.” Definitely.] I like the mind-speak there. [And this feels more than amazing, because you didn’t realize it would feel this good just to touch him.] The fact that him going crazy over just touching the guy hits the romantic in me because it’s almost not just about the physical. Or so that line is making me think. I mean, sure, they’re doing things, but he’s severely underestimated how good it’d feel to just be in the guy’s presence. And that makes me think that maybe there’s a hell of a lot more than just an urge behind their non-relation. [This started so different. Finished… so strange.] Just one of those achingly-pretty lines. [You wonder for a second why they call it ‘love’. It’s such a… beautiful word. But it isn’t beautiful. It’s nervousness. It’s heat. It’s a feeling of knowing that you’ll never be the same, like you’ll be hanging by a thread for the rest of your life. It’s madness. It’s losing control. It’s feeling like you’re trading pieces of yourselves until you’re as much him as you are you. // It’s almost beautiful, but a little different. You’re just not sure how.] I love everything about the ending of this. WOW. I hope you either write more second-person shots or do something more with these guys because this just wasn’t enough. And I hope you know how much of a huge COMPLIMENT that is. So take it like one and treasure it. ;-p Because I’m hooked on your writing, just like I have been for such a long time, now. And you’d better know that so many people love your stuff, too. So it’s only fair to write more for them, right? Right. ;-)
DreamsFears 2005-12-04 ch 1,	abusethis is really good!
htmraw 2005-11-29 ch 1,	abuseHuge grin Awesome! Best smut I've read in a long while.
Julia D. Castwyth 2005-11-28 ch 1,	abuseOMG! WTF? Is this the new one-parter you were telling me about today? AWESOME! I told you I loved your writing, but this takes the "Cake"... Go for the gold! God, you are amazing... I worship you... bow and grin wickedly at the same time Pax,Julia
emerald raven 2005-11-27 ch 1,	abusei dont have to hit, cause you got it to me like the glorious beat you are ^.^ this was great, i loved the way you wrote it from a different perpesctive than normal. it just felt like i was there - you evil person, writing better than me ::huffs:: ...lol i love you really, i started on chapter fourteen a couple of days ago so me thinks i should have another chapter for you soon ^.^this was great honey, can't wait for more of your brilliant writing! luv ya muchly emerald raven x x x
mechante fille 2005-11-26 ch 1,	abuseI'm usually not a fan of 2nd person, but that was really good. I like that it was smut - written differently. The smut is always better when there are layers of relationship and emotion under the act. Very nice, thanks!
Marylyn-Mercy 2005-11-26 ch 1,	abuseWow. This story is amazing. The angles and impersonal characters and writing; everything is superb and you really feel the emotion. One of the best written things I've read on FicPress so far. :) Wonderful work; hope you do more. -MM
Comodin 2005-11-26 ch 1,	abuseDon't you love that, when you just get up one day and think, "You know, I should write something freaking hot and sexy today after breakfast..." Well. I'm sure it didn't go down exactly like that or at that time, but that's what it is :-) It's so unusual to see something in 2nd. Most people aren't really comfortable with it, or think they're comfortable with it and do a poor job. You do it very well. It flows beautifully. The desperation shines through enough to give it that edge that makes it so sexy. Love it ;-) So glad I didn't wait until tomorrow to read.
Yoyo-chan 2005-11-26 ch 1,	abuseoh, I don't think I've read a story lately written in second person ^_^. That rocked. And it was hot. You're a great writer.

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