The line "setting fire to my hair" really emphasized the emotion in this. Great work!

*shivers* "setting fire to my hair"!

I like the honesty behind the emotion in this, about feeling both physically and mentally sick because you're so bored and sick of the dullness around you to the point where you think you're going to go insane.

I won't pretend that I know anything about poetry. Because I don't. But I really liked this poem, because it reminded me of a feeling I've had before. Just sitting around, eating, feeling crappy and bored.

Anyway, you write very well. Great work!

There's a sense of boredom felt here, but not to such a degree to make the poem feel lax. It's more boredom in the act of finding something to occupy the time within the poem, doing just what this line states:

'I’ll take anything that’ll make me feel less weak'

It's also interesting to see this outreaching towards another in the hopes of finding relief for that boredom, to detract away from the mundane, as it's mentioned several times over, and to bring energy to an otherwise dull lifestyle. And yet in not being able to grasp this freedom, the narrator continues to feel less and less, digging a deeper hole to hide in until something can shine a much needed light of saviour and hope. But, perhaps that alone is why the narrator wishes to set fire to thier hair, drawing a beacon of self to the world.

I like this poem, it's a nice draw away from strict emotion, bringing more of a lax feeling, yet humbled at the same time. Keep up the great work *smiles*