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| Sweet Lunacy 2007-07-22 ch 15,  | abuseVery very well written...I wanted to wait until I'd finished to review..I simply could not stop reading it..Amazing... |
| dirty windows 2006-08-10 ch 1, | abuseThese are so whimsical, and remind me of pale, pastel shades of darkness. My favourite ones are "Sunshine is colourless, it tastes of yellow" and "baby blue eyes and a soul as black as morning". The last one has such a nice contrast. And the first, well I don't really know why I love it so much. It's just so beautiful and abstract. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 15, | abuseWait, how did it take the warmth and leave the light. See, warmth is but a product of light. Interesting. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 14, | abuseWell, this is another one I don't get. How does elusiveness make you poetic anyways? |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 13, | abuseYep, always make sure not to drop a silence. See, silences can be very fragile. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 12, | abuseNo, neither would I. Happiness is a rather nice thing. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 11, | abuseSorry, but I didn't understand it. But please, don't kill yourself. Twould sadden me greatly. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 10, | abuseI must say Autumn is my favorite season. Tis a very pretty time of the year. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 8, | abuse"Sunshine is colourless" that bit of the poem is very, very true. However, the second bit is an insult to the far more significant colors in sunlight. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 7, | abuseInteresting bit there. Very kool imagery. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 6, | abusewait, how is morning black. Anyways, most excellent. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 5, | abuseButterflies are pretty. Well, that's just me. Anyways, excellent bit. |
| rrmehta364 2006-04-18 ch 4, | abuseYes, it is strange how the things that are supposed to send us flying only hold us back in the end. Great poem/thingy. -peace out. |
| Finger Dingbat 2006-04-16 ch 15, | abusegreat job, once again, but everythings so short, the different poems kinda run into each other,but i know moments are hard to pin down and expresses, and your doing a wonderful job, keep on with everything, and update soon -X |
| Named Gene 2006-04-15 ch 15, | abuseLovely m'dear! It's nice to see some conciseness... 1. This was probably one of my favorites straight away; so much to say in so few lines. The last two are what really hit, though the first is a nice addition. Cookies and confetti! 2. I didn't quite feel this one, though I did like the "like _, like _" at the end. Just not many fresh images... 5. I liked the sort of calm feeling to this. It reminds me of ze haiku. 6. Hehe. Okay, I totally thought, "Chucky!" (I first spelled that "Chunky.") 7. "It tastes of yellow." I like that, though it's hard to imagine. 11. O, deepness. The distinction between "with" and "for" for what really make this. 13. My other favorite! I had this wonderful image. I don't know if I just watch too much television, but you know those Caprisun commercials with the silver people running around? That's what went through my head. Hee. |