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| The Beautiful Underdog 2005-11-30 ch 1, | abuseomg, its wonderful. i luve it! yay! |
| Arwen Starfire 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abuseWow. this story is so powerful. Beautiful point of view. The repetition gives the story rhythm and voice. But I didn't know the relationship of the man to the narrator nor his age until the very end. If you give hints near the beginning that it is a romantic type of relationship, that the narrator really does love the sick person alot, it will make the story even more emotional and powerful, and make the reader more envolved and interested in the story. You have a wonderful writing style. Keep up the good work! (I just love using cliches like that on people) |
| gentlemenpreferblondes 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abusei thought this was good- pretty, in a strange way. and although im a christian and believe God exists, i know the feeling of wondering if someones listening when i talk. good job of making someone relate a little bit to a horrible situation in a short space. |
| EvangelineGoth 2005-11-28 ch 1, | abuseWhoa!! This fic was VERY touching and -sniff- b-beauttiFUL!! -sniff- |