Good job! You have improved your descriptions and the story flows nicely now! :) I liked how Arthur was inspired to marry her earlier than planned :)Please tell us about the wedding! :)

I'm glad to see that you're reverting to classic tale and retelling it with your own twists. Sometimes it's best to recycle a plot, rather than thinking of a half-rate new one. That's what attracted me to this story. So far, I'm impressed by some aspects and disappointed by others.

I like how this is told from Guinevere's perspective. She's often overlooked as the helpless or shrewish woman in Arthurian romances, but it's interesting and gratifying, the way you're portraying her here.

Some of the things you're saying, though, don't really add up with what I know about Arthurian myth. The ages of Guinevere and Arthur are different from what you have, as are their general appearances. Both T.H. White's 'The Once and Future King' and Sir Thomas Malory's 'Le Morte D'Arthur' are incredibly descriptive and enthralling books--they're hard to follow, especially for a young writer. But I might suggest that you read a bit more on the subject before finishing your story.

I don't like your introduction. You switch from third to first person and it's a little confusing.

I do like the general direction this is heading more, and will therefore read more.

Nice job, overall.

This is awesome, why haven't you updated in so long!

Hey, I just wanted to tell you that bats don't bite and they didn't normally have cupboards in castles, and ask how in the world the bats got into the castle, and into a cupboard of all places? Well, I wish you luck with your story.

I thought I would like it, but I am dissapointed that you put so much lust into the story. I'm sorry to say I wish I could remove my first reveiw.

I love the story of King Arthur, Guinevere and Lancelot, it is one of my favorite stories. And your rendition of it so far is good! keep on!

UPDATE THIS!

I really like the undertowed relationship between Lance and Gwen. I would like to know more about what happened between them. Update this soon, ok?

So cute with the bats and the ghosts. that was good.

I like you're version of her.

I’m glade to see that you finally updated; I was beginning to think that you had given up. It was good; you display Arthur’s lust and Guinevere’s hesitation well. As well as Lancelot’s bitter jealousy over they’re paring.

The wizard, Merlin, was quite a guy. -That line made me laugh; the modernization of that saying was just so cute.

Keep up the good work, and don’t go so long without updating.

Juliet.

HURRY UP AND UPDATE THIS! COME ON NOW!

Its a little flowery at times but it works with the style of it. Update!

I like this a lot! I'm really into studying the Middle Ages. They fascinate me, and this story is such a help. The descriptions are great and you really developed Megan and Guinivere. Keep it up!

Don't try to be pretty, just tell the story. We don't need descriptions like, "creamy as silk", "bluest ocean to be seen for miles" and "color of fresh milk", "angelic, raspberry lips". Also, some of your sentences are a bit confusing and tend to run on. I like your main premise and the general flow and plot, however, I think you need to work on your description and grammer just a bit.