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| sporkofdoom 2006-11-30 ch 1, | abuseThe imagery in this is unbelievable. Wow. |
| Lucid Nonsense 2006-04-28 ch 1, | abuseLovely, great imagery and as always, wonderfully descriptive. |
| Black Jester 2006-02-28 ch 1, | abuseI'm reading my way through your poems right now, and I just had to stop a moment to review and get my thoughts together. Your writing is very rife with wonderful imagery, and it's really apparent in this poem. "as we watch the boys re-enact scenes from Hamletwith icicles for weapons andthe only blood shed is the dew of melting daggers." The above is really, really great, and there's a sort of comfortable "creakiness" in your writing. I'm sure you don't know what I mean, but, how should I put this; It feels like I should be curled up under a blanket with a cup of tea, reading these poems (and this one in particular) from a thick, leather-bound book. Very good, as the bottom line, that is. |
| Jezsh 2005-12-21 ch 1, | abusebeautiful beautiful images, so whimsical, like frosted glass |
| beti213 2005-12-20 ch 1, | abusewow. this is charming and cozy, simple and creative. I love the little images and likenesses you throw in like nothing ("sagging mouths of old dormitories" and snow "darting like frightened geese") there is so much sensory imagery-the hot/cold tension and all of the light flying around. amazing. going into my favorites. |
| a lonely september 2005-12-19 ch 1, | abuse(first of all, thank-you for your review, it was extremely helpful)- anyway, about this poem, i loved how it all seemed to filled with warmth & everything, it made me forget the title, the ending was so chilling because of all the warmth you put above it. you did a wonderful job. |
| writerforever 2005-12-16 ch 1, | abuseA beautifully written poem. Wonderful job! |
| citrus scented 2005-12-12 ch 1, | abusewow this is so sweet and uplifting. it really is a beautiful scene you paintt and with your unique and strikingly vivid descriptions you make it ao real. "window panes spidered with ice" -geeze the brilliance. |
| Chandra-Moon 2005-12-11 ch 1, | abuseOh, this was lovely and perfect. I could see everything perfectly--I live in Florida, and would like to school up north, and this is how I would love my first winter in college to be. Absolutely beautiful. Keep writing. |
| Aslan Israel 2005-12-03 ch 1, | abuseI like the end... to be content with not knowing. It seems after going through some classes at school, I look at things in a scientific way, and it just ruins life. Great job with this. |
| smile persephone 2005-12-02 ch 1, | abuseThis is gorgeous. Brittlebeautiful in a sense. I adore the imagery and diction (as always with your poetry). Breathing crystals is such a wonderful concept. Lovely, so very lovely. |
| Changethesubject 2005-11-30 ch 1, | abusei love the expressive description, congratulations, i could SEE this poem happening. it is really well done. the imagery spills out of the words, i love it. |
| Moondog Dozier 2005-11-30 ch 1, | abuseExtremely descriptive."window panes spidered with ice", that's imagery, this whole poem oozes with action that has been brought forth in unique word choices. |
| not sure yet 2005-11-29 ch 1, | abuseo, i love this, adore it actually, the imagery was incredible, made me feel so content and happy, warm in the cold, it's very wintery and stands as such a lovely slice of life, beautifully done, love love love love it times a billion |