|Reviews for My Undetected Canoodling|
| omaterluna 1/14/06 . chapter 7
I'm in love with this story. it's brilliant and your writng is briliant.
| omaterluna 1/14/06 . chapter 1
great start. love how your character is writing in a journal at the beginning. its a bril fic! and if u have time comment on my ONLY story. I would appreciate that.
| ladededa 1/14/06 . chapter 7
i love this i started reading it and i couldnt stop. hope you update soon!
| RainySunshine 1/14/06 . chapter 7
What a great story! I absolutely love the chemistry between Roth and Jane. I also love how, for once, it's the guy who realizes his feelings before the girl. It's very refreshing.
| Plinky 1/14/06 . chapter 7
Ohh... great chapter!
House is cool.
Aww, I love Roth even more for what he did with the whole Grandparents thing - that's absolutely adorable.
Nerds are adorable. Seriously adorable. I completely get that.
The whole present thing with it being in his pocket and what it was and his smile and ... *Swoons* Beautifully written.
It really was the sweetest thing ever! It was adorable! Come on Jane, how much does this guy need to give before you just admit it! Jesus.
"Roth said he'd always wanted to get to know his extended family better." Hahahahahahahahahaha - Roth's brilliant.
"I've always had a thing for his eyes" Ooh nice. It's nice to see that there was more background than when we (the readers) met him, if this sentence makes any sense.
"(when he was in middle school he really got into slight of hand tricks)" Aww, cute detail.
Wow, beautiful description of the photograph. I love it.
I LOVE THE NOTEBOOK! *Sigh* Don't know if you're british or american, but it really isn't a big movie over here, so I was really surprised to see the quote from it. Really made me smile.
And I love quotes. I collect them too. XD
I'm always showing up in my stories! Hehe. So I totally get that.
Please please please update soon! I'm getting serious reading withdrawal - everyone's updating really slowly at the moment. Argh.
| Phoenix-ofthe-Goldenrose 1/13/06 . chapter 7
I think that Roth likes Jane! Teehee! And he sure sounds like a nerd to me. Gak, Jane reminds me of myself! My middle name is Jane, which makes it all the more scary. Well, update soon, and please ignore me as I twitch from the scary similarities.
| messy 1/13/06 . chapter 7
i def hope that she continues to talk to roth in the next chapter. he always leaves her with so many questions running through her head.
| FamousOneLiners 1/13/06 . chapter 7
definitely love these chapters and gotta love the nerds/
| Eveiveneg 1/13/06 . chapter 7
Heh, I'm glad you liked it. I've never been all that good at summaries either, so I was kind of ashamed of myself for being able to do it so easily for someone else's story while mine... Well, yeah.
But I just came up with it immediately after seeing you were thinking of a new summary. You're really good at writing, so it wasn't too hard.
You know, I didn't originally want to read this because of that summary. 'Watch Janey fumble, crash, and burn...' Shudder. I hate those stories. I had a good enough fill of depressing stories in sixth grade. My teacher was like a sadist or something and was attempting to initiate me into the cult. Watch out for those English instructors. They're just weird.
Good luck with the next chapter. I await with bated breath, and I'm just far too popular and loved to die.
| Eveiveneg 1/9/06 . chapter 6
I've got one idea for a new summary. Just read it through first before you reject it, 'kay?
'The seemingly unrequited crush on your best friend... The perfect romantic cliche, and those always work out. Then again, when an evil older brother, mind games, and those awful dirty little secrets are thrown in the mix, maybe this cliche wasn't as perfect as it seemed...'
So, if you don't like it, don't use it, all right? It is a good idea to change the summary. It's really kind of misleading.
I like the story quite a bit, but... Oh, I dunno. You kind of sped through it. It's fun to draw these things out for a bit before you advance so far into it.
| Alexandra Ann 1/9/06 . chapter 6
I love this story so much! You HAVE to update as soon as you can! Or else..I'll be in tears and that's not something you'll want! Hahaha, well..good luck with the story! It's so good so far. I love Roth and part of me wishes he were still fat. That way there isn't room to wonder if the change is a bit..superficial. But nonetheless..I'm glad he's cute cuz..well :) Robbie, though, I haven't liked the suond of him from the beginning. When you first introduced him, I was like PLEASE someone else come into the picture..
Speaking of picture..you should post pictures of your characters! I'd love to see Roth. And for some reason, whenever you describe Robbie, I always imagine someone with a bit of a tummy on him. But I know that can't be possible since apparently "all the girls" want Robbie..or should I say..have had Robbie..and that he's so against fat people. Which..just makes me hate him. And the fact he had an STD scare..and a pregnancy one..and just how STUPID he is about it.
But yeah..just wanted to let you know that I've fallen in love with this story and all the characters. Well..at least two of the characters.
I wonder if there's one Robbie fan out there..pulling for him. Well, I hope he gets left in the dust. LOOVED IT!
| Shannon 1/9/06 . chapter 6
I love this story! It is too great, I can hardly handle it. But I do handle it, and rather delightfully so. Roth has TOTALLY got the hots for Jane. Don't even tell me otherwise. I can see it in his eyes. And once she gets over Mr. Jerko over there, she can totally see it and they can fall in love and get married and have many children. Ah, I wish my life could be so wonderful.
Anyway, even if that's not the case (unlikely) I just love the story. Jane's POV is a HOOT, and I sincerely enjoy reading it. Please update asap!
| FamousOneLiners 1/9/06 . chapter 6
such great stuff!
| quietfool 1/8/06 . chapter 6
update soon please!
| Kursed4Life 1/8/06 . chapter 6
I love everything you've written, don't change a damn thing!