haha...sorry, on my last comment I put 'but you made me cry'. I meant 'and you made me cry'. XP sorry, I tend to obsess over wrong words.

This was sweet, romantic. You didn't get to much into detail (good!) but you made me cry. You are an amazing writer! ~**~Shardae's Feathers~**~

That was possibly the most beautiful love story. Really brought a tear to my eye. You write beautifully, keep up the spectacular work.

Awe... so sad...

I sure hope that Vince needs him!! I'm going to flame you if he doesn't... only not really.

I can't flame you, this story is WAY too good!!

Luvs, strawberry pocky, and yaoi,--Zephyr

You said, "love between two people is love, no matter the gender," and I have to agree. Absolutely, gender has nothing to do with it; love is love.

That being said, I don't doubt for a second that Ian loves Vincent but the latter I tend to question. Either he wasn't truly in love with his girlfriend, in which case he might have been in love with Ian all along, or he loved his girlfriend, and Ian is his rebound. It has only been three days, and he's already gone to Ian; I don't think anybody can mourn that fast. I guess it could be possible, but I'm worried about Ian. If Vincent is seeking comfort and is not in love then it is more than probable Ian will get hurt.

In the third chapter, you had Ian say, "Dude, you broke it," which I found so very nice. The fact that he said it and not only thought it shows just how deeply the rejection has hurt him. He made an effort and admitted his feelings, only to have them thrown back in his face. I see the "uttering" part as proof of intense emotion.

"It was broken... but now it's mended." It's lovely that you thought of writing that at the end. It reminds the title and the previous time when he mentioned it having been broken.

It is a gorgeous story, beautifully told!

Oh my god... this was so adorable. I swear, reading the last bit I was smiling really big. I really liked it. Ian was a total sweetheart.

A couple things you could improve on, though. I noticed some little confusions with adjectives, and some things like that. But that's it.

Overall, I think this story was very cute!

Oh my gosh that was such a good short story! I loved it :D.

Excellent chapter! I really like this story.

Aw that was a sad chapter. But hopefully Vince and Ian will now get together.

A great chapter. *goes to read the next one*

i like this story its a change to what i've read to day and the change is that their's a good ending ian found love and it hit a spot in my Heartless body it was that good

Aw This made my day! It makes me feel so warm and happy! Yay for Vince and Ian! :dances:

Can't wait for the sequel and your other one!! whoot

love xoxox

First of all I have to say I'm surprised... I thought only dweeby girls with sick obsessions with gay boys wrote stories with M/M themes. Apparently I was wrong.

Secondly: OUCH! REJECTION! Holy poo I would've reached over and slapped Vince!! I understand that he just lost a girlfriend but come on... :(

So are you writing more of this because I'm sort of confused heh. By short story do you mean you're going to keep writing chapters for me if not anyone else, or do you mean that you're going to stop and make me cry and then live with that guilt? Because I'm just not sure...

much love xoxoxo

Ooh thanks so much for updating. You have made my day.

This is so sad already...yay for angst. I love angsty stories.

It seems like Ian is caught between jealousy and the want to give Vince back what he wants "If only it had been me in the car…" and "If only he would kiss my forehead"

It's so sweet and sad at the same time...you must update because if you don't you will leave me feeling pitiful and sad and alone...!

xoxoxo

Your summary just dragged me in by my...hair...which really hurt damn it...hehe

Anyway. What I mean is is that you need to update almost immediately because if you don't I just might cry and then hunt you down and force you to...

Don't mean to sound...mean...*ok i do...*

UPDATE! PLEASE! THATS ALL I ASK!