so beautiful, it aches with the emotion, i see the betrayal in the very first words, leading up to the truth. i wonder, what image plays in your mind when you write this?

Nice incorporation of French, I love the language. Plus, the situation you describe has been repeated throughout history--leaders turning around and betraying people who believed in them (ie, Hitler and the Brown Shirts). Nice work! (Sorry I haven't come to this site in a while.)

fernch; beautiful language, it is just intoxicating to here.

honestly, this is such a breathtakingly bautiful piece. it brims with so much emotion and beauty that it touches the soul. THE perfect poem.

~* noelle

Your French is correct, and your poem is beautiful. I cannot say I understand it to full extent, but it still entranced me...the images you cast are always very powerful and hard to dispel afterwards...I love every single line...I admire you, even when you don't have inspiration...Love, Mia

That is incredible. I've never been gifted with poetry, but yours is inspirational. Yes, your french is correct, and I like how you've inserted it into your poem. It's a work of art.