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| Astarayl 2006-03-20 ch 1, | abuseI loved this. "Why'd you go and do that?"- the attitude is great.. I love the indignation. The feelings are readable enough that there is still an element of suspense up until the end. For such a short work, this was very well written. Good work. |
| a lonely september 2006-02-25 ch 1, | abusethis is so . . . different. the way it is. i would have never thought of anything like that and have been able to write it down in a way that has it prettier than poetry. it's so different. it leaves me feeling incomplete, not knowing what's next, but that's part of the mystery of this. |
| La Gitane 2006-01-08 ch 1, | abusePrecious! The first paragraph, which had in all honesty seemed a little pointless, ties in very pertinently with the end. And I would totally not mind having a relationship finish on me if it was for this reason. The uniqueness of it would be brilliant! |
| ayadora 2005-12-31 ch 1, | abusethat's an interesting thought. The mystery is gone...once he heard her voice. |