Amazing. Truly great! You used such descriptive language and it flowed very well. Great Great work! Well done. I love it! :)

I just... wow. This was amazing. There is power behind everyword, and that's a rare thing in writing. Truly very well done.

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i really liked that. the rhyming seemed to flow - it didn't appear to be forced, which is always good. good language. i enjoyed it and it's on my faves!