Wow, did not see that at all!You're writing skills make it so easy to read through.But... but I am so confused!It really hooked me in pretty much instantly.

this is a great piece! only one mistake that i could see, which was 'he wasn't that great of a swimmer'. i don't think the 'of' makes sense. but it might just be part of the american-english language, as opposed to british-english. but the ending was great, completely unexpected, and written perfectly. lovely piece!

thanks for the review!

KYA *runs in circles* WTF! NO you YOU you *stab stab*That was...it was great. It was one of the best one-shots ever, and it contains every necessary element, and it's topped off with your awesome writing skills. I'm adding it to my favs!