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Kurt Wagner 2006-08-20 ch 1,	abuseI love it. No complaints; only praise.
Raelin Cree 2006-01-21 ch 1,	abusei like it. the fact that is lacks rhyme makes me like it a bit more. nicely done
backseats on thursdays 2006-01-19 ch 1,	abuseWell said. Well done.
SSSSS 2005-12-25 ch 1,	abuseWhat to say, what to say? There's really not much to actually say, this poem's (like all the others) is just great! Tschau,Sam
Mary Phoenix 2005-12-25 ch 1,	abuseYou scare me. I'm putting you on my fav. writers list. I hope you don't mind. It just turns out that I like most of your writing. This is my last review to you unless you want me to review to the others, but I'm just gonna say right now that I like most of your stuff. So this like an all in one review. For this poem, the period on the last line is kinda bugging me but it goes with the "You." of the first line so I'll leave it alone. Good work!! And write more!!
wildwolffree17 2005-12-24 ch 1,	abuseExactly! That’s what I’ve thought for years and yet never penned. Beautiful.
DaidaiKokoro 2005-12-23 ch 1,	abuseThis is really deep... a full mental image the entire way. The best kind of poem is one that can paint pictures in the mind. A true artist, armed not with a paint brush, but a pen. ...or in this case, a keyboard. Lol.
XxDragon Princess NikkixX 2005-12-16 ch 1, anon.	abuseI really like this! The words you use are so simple but you string them together in a way that makes them powerful. They can stand on their own. Hehe. Great job! And thank you so much for your review :)!
puddleoftears 2005-12-14 ch 1,	abusereally good pice...i like how its broken up like that
Deep Mila NN 2005-12-11 ch 1,	abuseA Lovely poem, with so much sentiment incrusted within its verses. -Mila
Phoenix7 2005-12-09 ch 1,	abuseSelf-realization... A strong theme in my own more current works, actually. It's depressing just how few people ever come to realise their abilities far outstrip thier negative self-beliefs. Another powerful work, anyway. I like the short-statement structure: 'You.' 'Should you dare.' Makes for some good impact. Good metaphor use too - I like the 'Standing on a pedastal' allusion, a good reflection of the feeling of always being under scrutiny, and the falcon imagery, too, showing restrained and blinded power. One small criticism I might make is the splitting of sentences - 'Break from what / holds', and 'Inside of you I see / Potential'. It seems to jar the statement some - the rest of the poem is constructed from single-line sentences that read powerfully and smoothly, which kinda makes the double-lined ones seem almost 'snapped in two'. If you know what I mean. It may be just a pet-hate of mine, but I figured I should mention it anyways. An excellent piece, even so.
in theory 2005-12-05 ch 1,	abuseThe short length of the lines perfectly establishes a strong power behind your voice, I like this very much.
Not Quite Dry Eyed 2005-12-04 ch 1,	abusebefore i review this poem i just wanted to tell you even your reviews make me think...you describe things so well...you look at things in ways most people can't and that is a talent unique to you... well once again this is a great poem...i love how you described the person alone~~standing on a pedestal~~in a clearing~~the eye of the storm...it really draws people into there fears(not being alone and isolated)...then saying ~~always surronded~~always alone~~...it's a great way to descibe emotions(contradiction)...then going on to descibe them as a falcon on a trainers hand...it make so much sence and is very complex...your writing is extraordinary...great job...keep writing forever and always Twisted Harmony
Smoky Bear 2005-12-03 ch 1,	abusecool analogy it gives the poem more substance
vampiric-happenings 2005-12-03 ch 1,	abusei really liked it. i could understand it for the most part as well.

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