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| emergency goose situation 2006-01-10 ch 1,  | abuseWow, excellent message with so few words! "maybe one day I’ll pick you up" is a great line. I also really liked the last, like the person was asking what they thought but somehow didn't really care... it was awesome. Keep writing! |
| La Gitane 2006-01-02 ch 1, | abuseThe merit of this poem is one can read various things into it. I like your first line, though perhaps capitalising the 'boom' would be beneficial, if only to give some weight to the word. Simple, but good. And a nice ending. Gives it an interesting tone... |
| Victim of the Wraith 2006-01-01 ch 1, | abuseit seems a bit like children playing with blocks and knocking them down before building them back up again. Though it seems like they've reverted to that and they're grown up, apologizing for screwing something up but wanting permission to fix what they've destroy. I'll end my rant now. It's a nice peice. Keep up the good work. |
| Ajna 2005-12-31 ch 1, | abuseA bit comical but serious at the same time. :) Great work. |