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no.peace.los.angeles 2006-10-09 . chapter 1
Wow. Your writing never fails to just astound me. You use the most interesting phrases and words in your pieces - things like carving out your insides like a pumpkin on Halloween and being glad your hair isn't machine washable. And because this feels so real and tangible, that makes it even more heartbreaking, especially the last actual stanza of the piece. You are amazing. I'm favoriting this (like I do with practically every piece of yours, lol). Keep writing! :)
tasted like heartache 2006-02-13 . chapter 1
That was so pretty, I wish I could write poetry like that.. good job.
White Tea and Ginger 2006-01-07 . chapter 1
Oh, painful. It makes me ache.
Written 2005-12-21 . chapter 1
This is beautiful and frightening.
Thorn's-girl 2005-12-20 . chapter 1
This is the reason I have recently been driven over the edge. I read this about two weeks ago, fictionpress wouldn't let me review it, and I almost killed the computer.

This piece, simply put, is amazing.

If I may be so bold, I think it is one of your best. I would quote you but every single line is beautiful. But this one right here almost made me cry.

"it should have been me buying bucket fullsof rainbow bands to sell to families and friendsit should have been me missing Christmas dayto be hooked up to a machine and throwing upparacetamol."

Its overwhelming. Sad doesn't even begin to do it justice, heartbreaking is overused if accurate, and bittersweet fits, but again, I use it too much. It is gorgeous, pwerful, and is the cause of the odd stinging sensation in my eyes. I hope this is hypothetical, and not based off your life, but you've written a few other pieces that seem to follow the same thread. If its true, then it must be ** awful, and I'm sorry. Sorry is so inadequate...
HellHeartedlyBent 2005-12-18 . chapter 1
every one i read gets better than the last. i know im probably gushing you with praise but this was very beautiful. im looking forward to reading more.
simpleplan13 2005-12-16 . chapter 1
wow.. so powerful.. i love that pumpkin thing & the correlation of the first and last line is awesome... amazing piece
Chandra-Moon 2005-12-11 . chapter 1
I am so jealous of the way you can put so much power and emotion into each and every word. So much meaning. I've tried looking for a trick you use, but I haven't found it. It makes for writing that makes me want to cry, though. A very good thing.Good job, keep writing.
Galadh Niniel 2005-12-07 . chapter 1
Tragic and haunting. Makes me so sad.
star blanket river child 2005-12-06 . chapter 1
"I cry every time I have my hair dyed because once again it doesn't make me beautiful." Tragically beautiful. The whole thing… I nearly cried. I really don't know how to comment on this, it's so sad, so amazing… just… as always, wonderful work, never stop writing.
Aquafied 2005-12-05 . chapter 1
the ending leaves a burning feeling of hate and desire.kind of like that taste after one purges themselves of impurities orally.and ever so clever you are with your words.you baffle me truly*swoon*
poetic abortion 2005-12-04 . chapter 1
it.breaks.my.heart.

~* noelle
a lonely september 2005-12-04 . chapter 1
this made me sososad. i can completely relate to this... it makes me want to cry. amazing.
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