Reviews for Elemental Guardian

Reviews For: Elemental Guardian - Reviews: Page 1 of 21

leemya 2008-02-27 ch 41,	abuseHi, Great story! Did Bailey forget about the elemental lessons? Are you going to update this story soon?
naningxoxo 2008-02-10 ch 41,	abuseFor some reason... I still don't trust Pierce. I would much rather have Kenny for Bailey. I mean at least he isn't a backstabbing liar who is looking to use Bailey for his plan... maybe he's changed but I still dislike. Please update though.
concerto49 2008-01-26 ch 2,	abuseReview Marathon Event - refer to link in profile. Huge tense issues - even in the same sentence. It goes present to past and back again like a rollercoaster. Which one is it meant to be in? I'm really confused now. I don't think there's a need to describe the characters, especially the looks when it isn't relevant to the story. Do you just put it in whenever a character is introduced? Saying people wore clothes from x brand is meaningless - again describe when it requires. This feels rushed and things just happen. The story seems typical as well. Someone comes, has you lot have great powers, boom. Have to fight great evil. That's it... At least you tried to create some twists - like slightly anyway. "If not used or at least used correctly, your powers can grow restless and cause an unbalance in nature." - this bit was pretty interesting. I like the side-effects of the powers.
concerto49 2008-01-26 ch 1,	abuseReview Marathon Event - refer to link in profile. It started off slow and boring. I mean it went onto the background of their family and how the genes and things got to be. I think a lot of it dragged on. It was unnecessary to the plot. There's a lot of stuff said too. You're mean to show them when they happen. Most of the sentences were a little to simple - mainly it was this, or I this and that. Needs more variations. It didn't flow as good as well. The italics might have been good, but why bother? Isn't this first person anyway? Aren't you meant to express the persona's thoughts naturally? I thought the italics were trying to highlight the thoughts, but it got confusing. I think you were trying to separate describing what was happening and the persona's emotion's but you failed to create that separation as it crossed over and it didn't work out. I liked the concept but it didn't work. Slightly good finish but it needs more. At least you tried to tie-in with guessing who was there. As the introduction it should review some of what the plot should be about. It didn't do that. Only introduced a character - whilst good okay-ish with depth and all, but that good in terms of overall story.
Steph 2008-01-09 ch 41, anon.	abuseOMG I LOVE THIS STORY AND LIKE LOL AND IF THT CYNICALL BAND OR WHTEVER WAS REAL I WOULS LIKE BUY ALL THEIR ALBUMS.. IT SOUNDED PRETTY AWESOME, THE LYRICS AND ALL update soon plox.=]
Dream that was Life 2007-12-07 ch 41,	abuseI normally don't actually laugh out loud at stories, but when the fire hydrant shot a blast at Bailey I did, which is quite an accomplishment. Poor Kenny. Now I'm not totally sure about who's Alyssa's son. And wow, there's more to come! All I can say is, I think you used 'lied' when it would have been more correct to say 'lay'. Other than that, it's amazing. Hopefully you'll update it...? R.
Dream that was Life 2007-12-07 ch 40,	abuseOh, wow. That was an amazing pair of chapters, I think you really caught the feel well. And then she saw the future! But it wasn't a very nice future. Damn. Well, I better R&R that next chapter, right? R.
Dream that was Life 2007-12-07 ch 35,	abuseAh, so that's why! (this one'll be short, just so that I can read more of your amazing story!) R.
Dream that was Life 2007-12-07 ch 31,	abuseActually! What was that Witness-protection thing Naomi was under? Hm, I bet you at least another of them is on it, too? Or maybe Naomi or her family have something to do with Maverick, or something. Either way, I'm sure it's got something to do with it! Poor Kenny! He's so ill! I think I prefer Pierce, even though he has his dark little moments. I think I'll keep my ramblings to myself and read some more. R.
Dream that was Life 2007-12-07 ch 29,	abuseOh. My. GOD!! I wasn't going to review until nearer the end, but I had to say something. Is Chris Alyssa's son? Kenny seems a little unlikely, as he hasn't known his mum for a longer time than 11 years, hasn't he? Oh, and is Maverick the dad? It's all the rapist comments that made me freeze. If so, ew! I hope not, and it seems a little unlikely anyway. Oh, and what I've read so far is Amazing, really. See you in ten-or-so chapters! R.
MJE 2007-08-31 ch 41,	abuseCongratulations, AIAK! The chapter "Silly Siren, Sex Appeal isn't For Kids" in your story Elemental Guardian is the winner of Quirkiest Chapter Name at the SKoW Awards for Round 4. We look forward to seeing more creative, and more fun work from you :) You can now pick up your award's graphics banner from the SKoW website's "Winners" section. Once again, congratulations! - Joa, SKoW
E.Maginitive 2007-07-22 ch 41,	abuseI lovew this story but I can't help wondering about what Alyssa said...it's just a sneaking suspicion but could it be that Alyssa is Kenny's mom? Also, is Maverick Pierce's father? Is Pierce good...or bad? I hope Pierce is going to be with Bailey in the end! Plus, what's different about Bailey that Naomi said she felt like a human at first?! ARG...! So many questions (as you can see), PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
Lady Wolfine 2007-07-19 ch 41,	abuseWorking on it, working on it... I just got back from Seattle, and finally know what is going to happen in the next chapter. Poor Brenan... Those gremlins are pesy little buggers. Although, Bailey is really the one at fualt, because she did ask for it. And yeah, I was thinking about that cross-over chapter as a reality, if it should be agreeable to you.
MJE 2007-07-11 ch 28,	abuseCongratulations! This chapter ‘Silly Siren, Sex Appeal Isn't For Kids’ of the story has been nominated for the “Quirkiest Chapter Name” category in the SKoW Awards. Best wishes and keep up the amazing work! =] - Joa, SKoW
Lady Wolfine 2007-07-08 ch 40,	abuseOh, it hasn't been that long. Not by my standards... coughWerewolf of Seattlecough. I really am getting back to work on that, promise. I have a few line of the next chapter... anyway. Poor Bailey can see the future? That's kinda depressing. As if she doesn't have enough crap happening. But she does have a freakin' HOT shapeshifter to help her out. And a little sad, yes, that you are jealous of her. But I am no better.

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