This is a good example of writing, I really liked the way the words flowed into one another, and how you kept the reader completely hooked until we figured out the connection of the title to the poem. Such a harsh retribution, but from what I see, the father diserves what he gets.

wow this holds a lot of anger, i like this

Wow, the anger! Amazing. You can capture the emotion so perfectly. Great job.

~Leeona Trance

I must agree, supremely powerful. Though I don't understand why your aunt is reading this when you expressely asked her not to.

A very powerful expression of your true life experiences. I'm saddened that "my brother" and "your father" has caused so much hurt and disapointment in your life. Drugs and alcohol do nothing, but steal, kill and destroy lives. As long as a person is still breathing..there is hope. You are a gifted writer!! You are very special and I'm SO proud of you for all of your writings! I admire you and have so much respect for all you've done. Yo te amo con todo mi corazon mi pajarito.

Amber...

THISISAMAZING!

The emotion you've put into this is so hardhitting, I love the whole theme. and the line...

It’s time to pull the trigger

or put down the gun.

is truely genius.

I'd really love to ask YOU a MASIVE favour. I'm trying to write a story about this kinda thing, I'd really like your imput on my story 'Title:Unknown' I'd really love you for that, seeing as this poem is so... emotional and captures immense feelings so well. Please hit me back some time. You seem so talented!

PS:I don't often give raving reviews like this, but you deserved this one!