|Reviews for American Soldier|
| chicanerysmile 12/10/05 . chapter 1
I thought over it a second and then it made me laugh; was that completely inappropiate? Sorry if it was. Great writing as usual. Sad and beautiful and amazing and all those words that people - or me, I guess - say when they can't describe how good things are.
| AboveTheSalt 12/10/05 . chapter 1
this shouldn't have been a haiku. it's too flighty, too simplistic. no punch. the semicolon is also unnecessary - it's just like a sentence. i suggest expanding on this idea and incorporating some of your summary into a longer poem.
| Decollage 12/10/05 . chapter 1
The simplicity here makes the words all the more powerful.
| Mr. Arnold 12/9/05 . chapter 1
Yet again this could be looking very deep into this but I get the feeling that it implies they left with light hearts. (kind of like all those poor canadians who thought the great war was going to be like a 6 to 8 week vacation with some fighting here and there) So when he/she left they talked about the great tan they will get keeping there minds of the realities, such realities that the americans have tried to play down and returns unfulfilled from fighting a pointless war... yet again a whole lot from a few words, if you intended this then I will be quite surprised (your poems provide a good stimulant for interpretive thought) keep up the good work then
| Fabian Cortez 12/9/05 . chapter 1
So clearly indicative of the futility of it all.
| simpleplan13 12/9/05 . chapter 1
sad and beautiful
| poetic abortion 12/9/05 . chapter 1
I love how scathing, taunting it is and haunting all at once. the 'body bags' lin just breaks my heart and makes my heart beat painful pieces of itself. beautiful haiku, gorgeous last line too. . .true.
| D L Dzioba 12/8/05 . chapter 1
Haiku are easy but this one is superficial. If you want to write about Soldiers coming home in body bags, why not do a poem that can give more feeling.
| FELICIA-SPENCER 12/8/05 . chapter 1
Nicely done. I enjoyed reading this, and the subject at hand is so true. I hate that these young men die over trivial things, because that's what it all boils down to. This poem had beautiful imagery, with enough power behind it's words to shock even the toughest of hearts. Brilliant.
| twenty-second seduction 12/7/05 . chapter 1
perfection in three 're amazing.
| beti213 12/7/05 . chapter 1
*feels shrapnel whizzing past her ear*that's powerful. and short. a rare combination-so biting and injured... brilliant.
| Lady Luck 13 12/7/05 . chapter 1
WOW!even though its short it has a lot of meaning well done! much love Lady Luck 13 p.s thanks for ur review xoxo
| in theory 12/7/05 . chapter 1
Not being American, I don't grasp the reference to the tan thing. Well I do, but not in that way, cus us Brits are all pickled from too much wind and rain and complaining. Nice haiku, perfect flow as always. :) shalom.
| sunday night sky 12/7/05 . chapter 1
this poem nearly moved me to tears. beautiful work.
| KwazyKandyPie 12/7/05 . chapter 1
very nice! the whole haiku is great.-kwazykandypie AKA Kelly Ann-