 trash can art 2006-01-17 . chapter 1Aah, your wit--so satisfying.
I'm wondering; are you American? I noticed that while you chose to write about our country's inept society, you also celebrate Boxing Day [which no one here knew existed until Harry Potter came along], and you spell organization with an 's'.
I think I answered my own question. Okay. |
 iknowthethirdthingaboutpoetry 2005-12-07 . chapter 1Oh, I suppose I owe you a review after your loyalty/stalky-ish tendency to review my stuff two seconds after I posted them.
Just because I'm picky, first thing first: Fix your run-ons, man. The commas are unhappy because they're abused. :( The periods are unhappy because they're forgotten. :( And let's not go to how the semicolons are feeling. :(
And your = possessive, and you're = you are. Let's recite with me: your = possessive, and you're = you are. Rinse and repeat. :D
You have interesting advices, but I feel like they are drowning and yelping in those paragraphs. Maybe it's just my short attention span, but I had to read twice to find the key sentences. Maybe you can incorporate your advices in your headlines, so people kind of have an idea of what to look for before they read those paragraphs.
That's all for now. :D |