I can't believe I didn't notice this story before! I just love the intro, you certainly caught my attention. And the rest ain't bad either! =)

Wonderful story. The pacing is very good (It makes me realize what I need to be doing with my NaNo's, which go very slowly.) and really seems to fit together as a whole piece.

I was very aware of the tone of the thing, but it didn't distract me and it's hard to imagine it as anything else.

well i like to poke my fingers in loop holes and tug on luse ends but i realy cant find them.

as you state, this story was about the people of the dive. you conveayed enough feeling into them that i feel perfectly fine not knowing what became of the rest of the world. a little curousos as to what happened to Misha but i have alwase be curois by the large types like myself.

except for the rare missused word or mispelling i dont realy think you should change much at all. it is rather rare, well not with the number of books i read but far enough appart, that i have no major or minor qaums.

later

i like it, so many clasic ideas rolled into somthing familure but novel.

except for the slight errors, few as they are, it lookes great.

hope to see more

later