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| Miserable Regrets- Riafn 2007-12-20 ch 1,  | abuseExellent |
| Artemis Anderson 2007-12-19 ch 1, | abuseI love the flow of this one; great job! |
| painted.music 2007-08-23 ch 1, | abusekonnichi wa This was amazing! I loved it! Absolutely loved it! "I am your fallen Juliet/you are my bleeding Romeo" - wow! This poem was so awesome! Paalam -Shan- |
| servatis-a-pereculum 2006-11-27 ch 1, | abuseI like this one! It's short, but it somehow captures something...You've been added to my Favorite Authors list! |
| Seventh Chords 2006-11-11 ch 1, | abuseWow. Great job with this piece. |
| Itamidome 2006-10-30 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful. |
| Da Vinci at Work 2006-10-26 ch 1, | abuseAnother very touching free verse poem. I like how it all ties in with Shakespeare. The last line seems to linger in the air: "th eplay was just for show"... |
| Travis C. Eckert 2006-07-03 ch 1, | abuseCool, all I can really say about this. |
| With Rhyme and Reason 2006-04-16 ch 1, | abuseI like this poem right now... and so I'll review it now because I might not like it later. I'm in a very good mood, you see. And when I'm in a BAD mood, I automatically leave VERY evil reviews for all free verse poetry. However (and yes, you are an exception!), there will be no bad review here because I am in the said good mood. Anyway... on to the actual review. Romeo and Juliet, Pyramus and Thisbe, etc., etc., etc. Yes, a very topic indeed. The idea of lovers have their love forbidden and then somehow both ending up dead NEVER gets old! (This probably has something to do with today's morbid psyche.) My favorite lines are: "I am your fallen Juliet / you are my bleeding Romeo." Very nice, very pretty. The only thing I would recommend would be going more in-depth into the story. Show that you REALLY have read the play. Then wow people with your amazing intelligence, superiority, and the fact that you're a member of the Shakespearean literati. Wow. Okay, I need to back off the sugar. Nice job, anyway. |
| sleeping Pisces 2006-04-12 ch 1, | abuse(again) great flow, great idea and a nice mixture of innocent love and angst. This is probably my favorite of your poems, mainly for its simplicity (which I love, being a haiku writer). Love the last line. Peace, Daze |
| method acting 2006-03-23 ch 1, | abuseQuaint idea. Angst in some lines, but catchy and you didn't muss up the flow at all. In fact, it was quite...rephrasable, you know? It was definatly cutesy (oddly so, for a piece with the words bleeding and fallen and all of that) But I thought it was a nice lymric of sorts. It reminded me of some excert from some poprockingemo band a girl might have in her profile. Not a bad thing, it is what it is. I especially liked the last line. You deomastrate an exceptional amount of control with your words. Fine job. |
| fall3n ang3l 2006-03-19 ch 1, | abusebeautiful. |
| Black and White Dreams 2006-03-13 ch 1, | abuseamazing! its so beautiful! "I am your fallen Juliet/ You are my bleeding Romeo/ The words he wrote were ours alone/ The play was just for show" those words really stand out! beautifuly amazing job! love, Caitlin |
| sunshineofyourlife 2006-03-13 ch 1, | abusegah!! you never cease to amaze me. this is like...wow. except a midsummer nights dream is kinda more up my ally, but shakespeare just plain rocks (unless we are talking about Julius Ceaser, that play should have never come into existence). |
| v-double-ee 2006-03-12 ch 1, | abusewow. |