amazingly philosophical, with great imagery, esp. the frozen waters. wonderful poem!

i love this - really original and powerful. great work!

Beautiful. Loved it. Mortality, immortality, they both have their edges, no?

I like this poem, and I especially like the poisioned apple and frozen water imagery. So desolate and painful. Very nice, very realistic. Your first lines are great: "Lifted above ethics / I become immortal." Nice job.

this was superbly written. loved the power it possessed.