Wow. That was really good.

I love this so much! It wasn't funny, per se, but it was oozing satire. Which made it funny.

Kudos. This is TOTALLY faved.

Very interesting beginning. You used the style used in a "tell-tale-heart" or something like that by Edgar Allen Poe. He began by telling the readers that he had committed a crime, and such. Anyways, this isn't my point, my point is that you started the story off interestingly. I always do love reading new versions of Shakespear's stories. But I'm glad it's not a redo of Romeo&Juliet...I was getting rather bored of that. lols. Anyways, I enjoyed this chapter, and now I've got to go study! I
''ll review the next chapter when I have the time.

Am really enjoying this, you write very well and realistically, plus the story flows nicely. I love to read about the whole American/Canadian High School experience, seems so different to what it's like in the UK.

Very interesting ending, a change of perspective to the antagonists. And I see Octavius has come in in the forom of Oscar. Wow, really, really, REALLY sad...but like I said, it's a tragedy. Now all of the main characters either hate themselves or are dead or both...I feel all depressed. No, jk, lol. But I really liked the ending of it with a Shakespearean sonnet, nice touch there. And recent references to two of his other works. I congratulate you on this entire work, and look forward to finishing the actual play and possibly reading more of your works. Until then,

Samwise

Wow. Pretty sad ending, but I guess that's why Shakespeare called it "The Tragedy of Julius Caesar." Poor Brian and conspirators. I really liked two things about this chapter: the moment of realization in which Brian saw that he and his friends were the real hypocrites/murderers, and when he actually compared himself to the real Shakespearean play. That was clever; ironic, but a nice twist. So now I know how it all ends...Good job. On to the epilogue!-Samwise

I'm still liking how this is progressing, though I noticed you left out a few things: The new triumverate of Antony, Octavius, and Lepidus wasn't in there, and neither was Cassius' "Come, stab me! Even when you hated him most, you still loved him more than Cassius!" A few things left out, but other than that, pretty good. And Julie's ghost appeared, as I had expected. That's good. We'll soon see what happens at St. Phillip's Park...

-Samwise the Eagerly Expectant

Ok, I'm a little behind now, as I am only now on Act 3 and my English class will probably be finishing the play tomorrow...But I'll try to catch up now. This is becoming very good, very intriguing; all the parallels between the two stories are really cool to notice. I liked the sentence near the beginning, "you could cut the tension with a knife", kind of a pun since they were going to cut her anyway. And of course, the classic line, "And you, Brian?" Then fall, Julie! Greatly dramatic in that part. And now we see Marc Antony coming to power, riling people against the conspirators...and a foreshadowed war at Philippi! Very good stuff, I really like this. Other than a few scattered grammatical errors and some language, this is turning out to be a good story. Hopefully I can finish it all like now!-Samwise

Ok, yeah I know I haven't reviewed this in a while, I was waiting because now I'm reading Ceasar at school and wanted to better see the parallels between the two. I'm still enjoying the story, Natlaie's premonitions are freaky but I guess stuff like that happened a lot in Shakespeare (and I haven't gotten to that part in the play yet). I'll read more soon, keep up the good work!-Samwise

this is the writer of the brotherhood thing.

yes, i do know guys this sensitive. all of my characters are real people (same names, same appearances, same feelings). yes jorge, west, alek, and jason are real (jason is my boyfriend actually).

all the people are real except for carl and gary.

but all others are actual people.

i'm julie

this is the writer of the brotherhood thing.

yes, i do know guys this sensitive. all of my characters are real people (same names, same appearances, same feelings). yes jorge, west, alek, and jason are real (jason is my boyfriend actually).

all the people are real except for carl and gary.

but all others are actual people.

i'm julie

OMG! That is honestly the best story that you have ever written! It was a pure genius. Brilliant Melissa, Brilliant. My only question was what they were going to with all the bodies and what exactly the number of casualties were? Anyways, hugely sucessful, congrads.Best, Alica

Whoa, this story just got really frightening. . .a group of high schoolers coolly calculating a murder! And I thought that the "assasination" part was just a metaphor. Well, the scenario seems highly unlikely to me, just because there's so many students involved and the probability of the situation is that someone would leak out the plot really fast. . .but I'm willing to be open-minded and see how you manage to make this believable. Besides that, your writing is generally easy and fun to read.

As far as reviews, I'm rather a loner on this site because I review everyone and anyone who leaves me a review, and keep on reviewing as long as I receive helpful feedback in return. However, since not many have the time or the desire to do the same, I rarely manage to establish the kind of working relationship I would like to with other fp.com authors. Sad, isn't it?

Anyhow, it was fun reading your story, and I hope to be able to continue. Good luck!

“Oh, Brian,” she said, gazing into my blue eyes with her bright green saucers, “if only you knew..."

haha. Good line.

I enjoyed reading this first installment. I like what I've seen so far of your style and I hope to be back to read more.

(Right now I'm on a mission to see how many fp.com authors believe in reviewing back.)

Also wanted to say thanks for the reviews on the Alchemist. Plan to write more soon.

Tschau,Sam