This is an awesome story!

I'm really sad you've discontinued. But the concert scene made me uber happy, so I forgive you. _

wow this is wicked good so far.

i'll finish tomorow

Srsly sad that this has been discontinued. I'm a lurker, and I love your stories (...sniff... don't hate me for not reviewing) and it's really depressing that such an awesome story's been blown out like... like a candle in the wind... like a ship from its mooring... and yeah you get it.

But it's freaking genius writing and hopefully we'll see more of it in the future.

Very nice!

I like it, quite a bit.

-alerts-

I LOVE MIKEY! I LOVE MIKEY!

ok. :P

well tommy's okay, but i LOVE mikey. HAHAHAHA.

continue the story already! wait, no.

continue all the stories already!

ok, kidding. just take your time. :P but just so you know, i think i love this one and mastercard theory the most. hehe. :)

It's dissapointing to see this is the last chapter you have up in half a year. Almost seven months.

This chapter appeared to be a filler as well. The Six Flags trip was more of a filler to build up to next chapter's actions. I don't know what's up Mikey's ass, but he better get it out.

Fast.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Now, I'll be reading your other stories. I hope they're just as well written as this one is.

You have no idea how much I'm hating Jordan's mom as of this moment. She thinks she can do anything she wants, minus the consequences. I think you should have Jordan beat her up one day, or get her to tell Tommy to do it.

That'd be a scene worth reading.

Eighth graders can get on the nerves of everyone. I've discovered that for myself.

Julie reminds me of the stone cold bitch that everyone learns to like because she's the only one left with some sort of common sense. Amy is the ditzy blonde who thinks the world revolves around her. Am I correct?

I liked how Tommy completely shut down Amy.

Oh shit, man! You truly had the drama unfold in this chapter! I like how Aidan immediately jumped the gun and blew up on her. It was about time. I was counting down the minutes until he wanted to kill her.

Keep it up.

The movie scene, to me, seemed quite repetitive. It only seems that Jordan's friends had been attacking her for ages about the issue. I think maybe it's time they let it go. But I understand about people not letting an issue slide easily.

The Shoprite scene made me laugh aloud. I could fully imagine that very thing happening actually. However, you made a very detrimental error. Instead of saying, suck my dick, you said suck my duck.

At first, I was wondering what you meant by that, but then I caught on.

This chapter was good.

This was also an excellent chapter. I like how you opened the chapter with sports references. I realize many people on this site are girls, so I don't see the athletic knowledge on display much. Good job on that.

There isn't really anything bad about this one, besides how you kept rambling on about their unorthodox ways. Cut down on the descriptions a bit. There's only so much a person can do.

Tommy is an interesting person to throw into their group. He adds a new twist to the plot and makes everything far more complicated than it has to be.

I can connect with the Spanish reviews by the way. They make my life a living hell.

Nice filler chapter. It gave a peek into what the school environment was going to be like, and what the people itself are like.

Why would a school not have a band room? That's cheap. Every school I know has a band room. That's definitely a new idea though.

When you're describing the insanity of the crew Aidan hangs out with, you use the words insanity, psychotic, crazy far too often. I think we get the idea of it.

But good chapter overall. As of this moment, Art and Leo are my favorite characters. They stand out the most.

This chapter seemed to be quite awkwardly put together, especially more towards the end. I found it unlikely for two twins to not recognize each other. It has been four years, but a few seconds should be all it takes for them to see the resemblance.

But asides from that, this is a good story. I'll be critiquing each of your stories. After I saw your name up on SKoW, I wanted to see how good you were as a writer.

You'll be hearing from me a lot.

great story. cant wait to see what's goin to happen between her and tommy and mikey