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| White-Dragon-Goddess 2006-09-28 ch 1,  | abuseShow Me now your deepest thought, Bring Me to the realm you sought, I can stop these thoughts of yours. But only if you want Me to. It is interesting how you make "Me" some kind of God... I love your poems...though I doubt YOU are my demon... ^_^ |
| Cedric Quilfeather 2006-03-06 ch 1, | abuse"I am your demon, I am your soul, I am the monster that makes you whole," Oh, chills. Out of the three poems, this is the most lyrical, powerful phrase. I love it. "inside My fae," I do not understand your use of "fae" here. Is it related to faerie, fairies, or just "face" without the "c"? I think we might be stretching for the rhyme a little too uncomfortably right here, lol. But great hitherto. To answer your question, the first speaker holds out ideas that I LIKE more, but the beckoning power of the second voice seems a little more convicted in what he's asking, what he's compelling the monster (and the readers) to do. Not to say that what he's offering is necessarily tempting or not, but it definitely feels like this voice speaks with greater "hard-and-fastness," to come up with a really bad phrase, lol. Very good. I will read Monster's Goal Part IV, if it comes out! |
| XxDragon Princess NikkixX 2006-02-06 ch 1, | abuseOoh..tough. I think both the dark and the light sides are really influencing. But I think the dark used more powerful words and therefore made a deeper impression. All the same, I loved all three parts. Excellent job! |
| Saber of shadow 2006-01-27 ch 1, | abuseMan. This song shows both the light and dark side. To quote californian style...AWESOME! |
| riskkeybusiness 2006-01-08 ch 1, | abuseOk, I've read all three of your poems, and I love them. So vivid, and they are brilliant. Well, really almost every poem is brilliant to me because I am a bit artistically challenged when it comes to poetry, BUT ANYWAYS... Hopefully soon I will have an answer to your question (about which side controls me) and it will probably come in the form of a poem. (hopefully.) |
| Lovejoy 2005-12-23 ch 1, | abuseMakes sense to me too. I noticed you like the Fight Club (great film by the way, excellent theme tune) and this poem kind of reminds me of that film, the whole set up. It's still has it's own unique element though which makes it so great to read. I'm waiting for part II mind... |
| Alteng 2005-12-19 ch 1, | abuseYeah, I get the idea of an arguement going on there. As for it being dominant, I see that too by the capatilizing of the "My" and "ME". I always wanted to write a story that used "I" in the lower case for someone who thought of themselves as dimuntive of others, but I never have got around to it. |
| lovingly.confused 2005-12-13 ch 1, | abuseI understand the explanation...you mean that he has two 'parts' to his mind...one, his 'dark' side *shivers* and one his 'good'. The dark side, in this one the is trying to persuade the person into 'letting him out' I guess you would say. Well, I understood it at first...ANYWAYS... I liked this poem. It portrays how I feel every once in a while...ok, a LOT. Keep writing! ~**~Shardae's Feathers~**~ |