hm intresting . Wow you really just jump straight into the story ! Lol I like that ,though I also like supsense that builds from waiting . Maybe when you go back over this you can insert more detail ? Detail is great and a writers best friend .

I like how this sounds . I love the whole "other world " thing ! I'm off to read the nexy chapter . .

Oh thank you for reading my story F,W&K ! Oh and for adding it to you fav's . Sorry I ahve to make you wait till Nov . but I promise it will be worth it ! I already have , er, 5 chapters written .

Write on .

M.

me quede bien picada, me gustan las historias de fantasia y ya me la imagino en pelicula!