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| sporkofdoom 2006-09-02 ch 1,   | Parts of this were really good. "dirty snow,' 'misery keeps me warm.' 'I seem to think that you are God,' There's a lot of lines that're really good, but the whole thing rambles a little and could use a little bit of editing. But parts of it are really beautiful. You've got a gift for clever lines. |