This would be lovely read aloud - you've got some great images here!

do I detect a note of sarcasm? Quite subtle, actually, I really like it.

Wow. Lovely abstract stuff you've got there. Poignant is the word! _

Excellent and vivid imagery, and realistic enough that you can feel the emotion behind this. Good job.

Trinity

this is woven together well, very colorful and the images jump out because they are unique. good write.