Wow, I really like this! It reminds me a little of the poem Said The Spider To The Fly. But, for some reason, some of it doesn't seem to flow right. I think there might be a few too many syllables in some of the lines. Great writing!

Haha, dear me. For some reason I always find text-speak disturbingly sinister, and all my texts are perfectly spelled. I hope that this poem was deeply ironic, and you're not hoping to take over the world with your SMSs (?) That would be scary. Anyway, it was nice to see an update from you :) I love your writing style.

Oh, and any chance of an update for "A Cliche..."? any time soon? I miss it :(

wo this POem is cool...and it has a Moral...lol ur such a gud writer!

Viv! I've said it once and ill say it again- you have such a talent for writing! Lol Loved the note-passing one, too bad that will never happen at our school, though i nearly got caught by Mr Pain once...

Sorry. Please excuse my pitiful attempt for a review! - Jess

very very dark at the end but oh so real and sad. good writing.

LOL lovely little peice of flash fiction thar. Why does it remind me of myself reveresed? *blushes*

"she isn't drunk on the alcohol so much as the atmosphere." that's great

I liked the reacurring theme of atmosphere - that's the motive (for lack of a better word) behind this whole peice. A bittersweet, kind of regretful feeling, but eventual acceptance of what happens and revelling in the moment. nice

I love this! I think it's great. The rhyme was simple and ...it kinda reminded me of one of those old moralistic nonesense poems, like "the new duckling" by alfred noyse, or something. loffly. i shall read more.

haha, that last one was pretty cute. great job.

That...is so cute and real. And I love how Michael has spelling problems or writes in l33t or whatever it's called. And damnit but I want it to happen to me because my crush's name is Michael too.

Boohoo. I'm going to go slit my wrists with my Rainbow Brite pencil case zipper now.

;D This was lovely. Really, it was.

VIV! I love this note-passing thing. I wish we went to a co-ed school, darnit. Harrumph.

Squee! Ha ha, you really know how to get a girl's romantic out. That was so effing -- AMAZINGLY sweet. It was -- an entire romance story (well, the ones that I like, anyway) packed into one chapter of notes!

=P Me like, as you can see.

Haha! Cute, cute. I loved the morals. =O -nods solemnly- Endearing emoticons = they exist, but only in moderation.

I like this poem. Despite it's simplistic nature, it hits home with a very valid point. Really nice!

*squeals girlishly"

OMG i loved it. The note writing thing is part of the charm!