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Reviews For: Comets

sporkofdoom 2006-11-30 ch 1,	This is amazing. "barely surviving on star-dust and satellite corpses" The metaphor in this is beautiful. So powerful.
violet bones 2006-03-14 ch 1,	this poem has such great energy and imagery. i really enjoyed it. well done!! love, VB
With Rhyme and Reason 2006-01-17 ch 1,	I really like your metaphor--the comets being people. We drive ourselves to our own ends; whether we believe in fate or not, we still manage to "kill ourselves" one way or another. The structure (or lack thereof) of this poem really bothered me. While you us beautiful language and imagery, you have absolutely not structure. There's "no rhyme or reason," as they say (and that especially applies here with your lack of rhyme scheme). I'm disappointed by this. You employ such a wide range of vocabulary (you use words ranging from "bones" to "wax" without even flinching) that it wouldn't be difficult, I don't think, to turn this into a sonnet or a villanelle--something structured; basically anything but disgustingly easily rhyming couplets would be fine for me. There is simply too much meter-less poetry out there. We don't need more. If you write with a structure, you'll stand out. It used to be the other way around, but now it's inverted. In closing, I'd like to compliment you again on your imagery, incredible metaphor, and dazzling use of language. Do I love this poem? No. Could I love this poem? Yes, with a little bit of structure. Nice job.
I wish i could fly 2006-01-16 ch 1,	love it. i really like the line "we exalted in the beauty of our ruin" most definently because that's how i feel right now.
White Tea and Ginger 2006-01-08 ch 1,	I love this. Beautiful imagery.
classic violet 2006-01-01 ch 1,	I think I'm going to cry, this poem is just... SO completely amazing. I am in awe at it's spectacular display and words used. Simply beautiful...
Aslan Israel 2005-12-30 ch 1,	Talk about intense. I can't even describe how much I love this. Beautiful descriptions, it's just awesome.
Moondog Dozier 2005-12-21 ch 1,	This jumps and starts really well. So many flying images create a wonderful final product. "we exalted in the- beauty of our ruin", is an extraordinary phrase. good write.
beti213 2005-12-20 ch 1,	wow. you know what makes a poem good, for me? color. this is so full of red and orange it's insane. I love the phrases "dancing in the exhaust tails of our own descent" and "molecules darting back to their own messy orbits". this is truly artful. bravo!
Winsome 2005-12-19 ch 1,	Ohh...how pretty and sad.I really liked the various allusions in this poem; it made it very well rounded.^^ Keep up the good work!
a lonely september 2005-12-19 ch 1,	this was beautiful(!) i would never be able to write anything as gorgeous as this, & i truly envy you.
writerforever 2005-12-16 ch 1,	Wow, excellent poem!
smile persephone 2005-12-16 ch 1,	I'm in love with 'pock-marked meteors', 'satellite corpses', and 'messy orbits'. And those Icarus references are gorgeous. (Yum.) I simply adore 'we wore burning lily wreaths//as our halos'. Damn you're a genius. I wish that I wrote as eloquently as you do. Oh and that imagery is to die for.
dollface and her cancer 2005-12-16 ch 1,	'Pock-marked meteors'. For some reason, that's such a perfect description of flawed beauty to me.. that's just.. yeah. And I love the Icarus complex you have going on here, all the way through. I really like this. I'm going back to read it again.

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