this has a pace to it that I really like...like it gets more into it with every line, speeding up, falling into the past and the present. Nice.

Aww... I really like this poem. It's cute, and just plain lovely. You have a very elegant style of writing!

I like that part: "with hearts in the flowerpots/on the windowsill, but/we're on the floor"...this is really interesting and could be interpreted many ways. Kind of fresh and bold, unique. Keep writing, thank you for the review.

'together now (let’s start it now)with hearts in the flowerpotson the windowsill, but'clearly the best part. nice job with this.

Every time you added (x-mas), I couldn't stop myself from laughing. Absolutely brilliant!

And I love the name Janelle and I've never met anyone with that name. ;)