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| JtheChosen1 2008-07-12 ch 17,  | abusegr8 story! |
| Naramyon 2008-05-09 ch 13, | abuse*jumps around excitedly* Darian must be hopping mad by now. *snickers* I almost feel sorry for him. Your imagery has slightly improved, but only just. At least you're making up for it with interesting dialouge. ~The Critic, Zoa |
| Naramyon 2008-05-09 ch 7, | abusePerfect cliff-hanger. *smirks* Something isn't right. We all know that Calen is better than Syfer (Seifer. Clever substitution. lol.), and that's what I'm worried about. It doesn't feel right. Something's going to happen. I like: 1. The world you created is fascinating. Rules, classes, etc. 2. I like how you arn't going out and telling us everything about the world, you're letting us figure it out as we go. (Maybe next you'll explain why some people have mage gifts, but other's don't.) ~The Critic, Zoa |
| Naramyon 2008-05-09 ch 5, | abuse*laughs* See? You made Calen cool! Wonder where all of the assassins are coming from. Maybe this Nikolai is a bad person. ~The Critic, Zoa |
| Naramyon 2008-05-09 ch 4, | abuseYay! You've given Calen more maucho(sp?). More manly now. Interesting. He knows it's you, you get your body back. He doesn't, you die. How does that work? You're doing a better job describing things here, though not nearly enough. Work on it. ~The Critic, Zoa |
| Blinking Blossom 2006-09-23 ch 17, | abuseYou shall write more! You must write more! If you don't, I'll set my evil flying pink tutu wearing hippo's on you!I love this story! |
| KageNeko 2006-08-19 ch 17, | abuseI like this as an ending better...if this is the end for you. A little vauge but, good never the less. Good job. |
| aknut 2006-08-18 ch 17, | abuseAHH! You continued! YAY! Please update soon! I want to see what happens when they get back!! |
| CaFFy 2006-08-18 ch 17, | abuseCute. |
| writer2000z 2006-08-17 ch 16, anon. | abuseWhen are you going to update this story? I want to know what happens next. |
| A.J. 2006-07-24 ch 16, anon. | abuseMore please! |
| KageNeko 2006-05-28 ch 16, | abuseNO NO YOU MUST GO ONthis is still a cliff hanger...and cliff hangers suck comeon write more please? i love it |
| Widom 2006-05-27 ch 1, | abusePoor Darian. I'm still sitting over here like a hopeful Darian-Calen fanatic in the hopes that Calen will spring back to life. |
| ShadesWithLove 2006-04-14 ch 15, | abuseIS this coming to an end? |
| CaFFy 2006-04-12 ch 15, | abuseYARR! Finish the story. It makes me happy that they're together. =D |