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| Raeveyna 2006-09-22 ch 25,   | woot! fabulous story! :D |
| heryseshta 2006-09-05 ch 25, | Personally I don't really think she is learning sign language too fast (I am a student sort of). First of all when you practice all day it is surprising how fast you can learn, and if the sign in your story is anything like real sign language there is an alphabet too for finger spelling.One suggestion I will make is that she makes a few mistakes, no matter how good you are you make mistakes, just like in spoken language. It could add some humor too. Just a suggestion. |
| GaelynX 2006-09-02 ch 24, | Well...it looks like Ikana won't have a "and they lived happily ever after" ending. But still...I give you thoudands of brownies for making the story that much interesting. It would have been very disappointing if it had ended like that. Too trite for me =) |
| Siffy 2006-09-02 ch 24, | Well, usually I can't stand stories about half human/half animal characters, but you've made this enjoyable enough. Good job! Two errors I saw that bugged me a bit were in chapter 20. “Just lick it. If you drink water right now, you will throw up.” "my body screaming for more to aid my parched tongue." Heh, but what is she going to lick with? And what tongue? |
| hope for rent 2006-09-02 ch 24, | Ha, Weir's an idiot. Even I could have figured out that Malachi would be abusive, especially after he's drunk. YAY! They got MARRIED! -squee! happy dance- "Remember to surface for air, dear brother." XD On a side note, the last I in 'Malachi' is always capitalized. Glitch, maybe? It's just bugging me, that's all. And my sympathies, for all the good they'll do. Try 'n update soon, 'kay? Indy |
| Nara Merald 2006-09-02 ch 24, | Wow, Weir certainly was filled with bitterness and hate! |
| GaelynX 2006-08-27 ch 23, | Oh!That's so cute! I hope she says yes. =) |
| Vance 2006-08-25 ch 23, | A very entertaining story, to be sure. I have just managed to read the entire thing, and it flows pretty well. A few things I found a bit unsettling: The Fall of Weir: was extremely fast. Frankly I thought that it would have taken more than it did to bring her down. Unless I missed something, and Weir was already supposed to have a bad reputation for lying in her tribe, you'd think her word would be at least as good as Vulisse's. The fight scenes: seem a bit glossed over. There's no actual fighting at all, it seems, it all happens in the background, behind the scenes. If that was your intention all along then you've handled it quite well. If it wasn't, then a bit more description couldn't hurt. All in all quite well done. The character development has been firmly set, and that's the important part. Hope to read more later! Don't let the story die. Cheers,Vance |
| hope for rent 2006-08-13 ch 23, | Aww, I feel special. -poke- All right, all right, you get your reprieve. Now I use the sniper rifle as punishment for those who don't review my story! -evil laugh- Parts I Liked: "Don’t make me punish you!”“With pants?” asked Auryx innocently from the doorway. The part about the broom being some obscure relative of doom. THEY'RE GETTING MARRIED!! Well... Auryx asked her, at least. Ikana better say yes. And Weir comes and crashes their wedding, and then Weir FINALLY DIES! -squee!- Squee!-fully, Indy |
| booksquirt 2006-08-09 ch 23, | Coolio story dude!! Can Ikana have some sort of magic that shows itself out of love or something?? Something to make her seem less defenseless! i hate damsel in distresses. girls can be just as god as boys, so why can't the heroine sometimes have some powers? Als just a thought can Ikana and Auryx be in some sort of prophecy that depicts the end of the conflict of the two warring people? or at least something flashy like that. preety plz?? with sprinkles, whipped cream and a cherry on top? UPDATE SOON, YA HEAR? |
| Dachande663-ff 2006-08-09 ch 23, | Wow. That is the only word I can use to describe this story. I've just read it straight through from start to finish and it has left me with an immense feelings of happiness for Ikana and Auryx. This is simply brilliant work! |
| Nara Merald 2006-08-09 ch 23, | I just found your story and think it's fantastic. I loved the world and the races, not to mention your well thought out characters and an interesting storyline. Update soon! |
| hope for rent 2006-08-08 ch 22, | Y'know what? I don't have the heart to threaten you. EVEN THOUGH IT TOOK YOU A MONTH AND A HALF. -snarl- "You two love each other, now let me sleep!" I love that line. Now update. Update AGAIN. Update SOON. Your reprieve won't last that long. Slightly irately, Indy |
| hope for rent 2006-07-29 ch 2, | Update. Now. -reaches for sniper rifle- I will find you. C'mon, it's been a month already! I mean, *I* updated... (well, rebooted is more the word, but you get the point.) Less than three, Indy |
| hope for rent 2006-07-20 ch 21, | Update. It's been, like, a month. Much less than three, Indy |