I was looking at the "Just In" page and, jeez... you slapped em all on at once, didn't you? lol. this particular one just happened to catch my attention.

Anyway, on to the review. I write a lot of my poems while blaring music. usually, my writing while differe depending on what type of music I'm listening to. And seeing as you were listening to metal, I can understand how this poem came to be.

I like the concept and actual content of this piece. The only thing I see wrong is the structure. The poem's format is

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Honestly, I don't recommend that format for ANY poem. try using unique formats which fit the content of the poem. For example, if the poem is crazy, make the structure crazy. if it is calm, make the structure calm. It adds another layer to the feelings of your poems and also makes what your saying clearer.