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| Image of the Invisible 2006-06-18 ch 1, | abuseSwapang! Love ett! Harhar. Miss you lovely. Update both soon! (= |
| iluvsweep 2005-12-21 ch 1, | abuseo nice story! i likee hehe, sounds really interesting. i love how you kind of give tidbits on stuff that happened in the past, but don't completely give everything away, and i really like rianna! she seems so cool! i want to not like paul...but he seems really genuine :( i'm really intrigued by amelia, what happened with hter? how did she die?? anyway, update soon!! i'll be waiting hehe, thank god for author alerts ;) |
| cheesecake.thief 2005-12-21 ch 1, | abuseI love Rianna's sense of character already. Even though she's not outwardly assertive, she's can be bent but not snapped. Neat. |
| alyssa 2005-12-20 ch 1, anon. | abusethis is really good so far! ahh i can feel all the tension between them- can't believe he did that! what a jerk..lol anyway UPDATE SOON PLEASE! |
| Ir0ckheh 2005-12-20 ch 1, | abuseUhh... you have a very nice plot line but um. Well... everytime you place a comma, there's ALWAYS and I mean ALWAYS an action after it. I read the whole thing and yeah, there were a lot of those. I get kinda annoyed to be honest. Maybe you can fix that if you have the time ^^. Anyway, just trying to help you improve your writing skill. Great start. Hoping chapter 2 is coming out soon. -Little Wolvie |