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Reviews For: Honor Roll Bound

ImaginaryGirlChild 2008-02-15 ch 1,	abuseAll in all I like this story. I think the dialog could definitely use some work, Mason's words were really...I don't even know how to explain it. Everything was a little rushed, though it is a one-shot so I understand why. Absolutely loved the newspaper bit at the end. Tied everything in very nicely. Very good job. ~Chelsea
The Ordinary Girl 2007-12-02 ch 1,	abuseThat was beautiful. I was completely blown away. I just sat there a few minutes after reading your story, just letting this sort of peaceful feeling rest over me, the emotions and descriptions lingering over me. While I do agree that Mason's words were sometimes a bit...cheesy for a lack of better word, but the whole story is wonderfully written. Good job.
Oscura 2007-11-19 ch 1,	abuseSad, yet endearing little one-shot. Makes me long for my own slice of serenity. Not the same way in which hers was delivered, but something that could equate to that feeling (if anything CAN measure up, you've built quite an impressive standard). Great piece of writing, I hope you continue writing.
Max Radio 2007-11-06 ch 1,	abuseSweet. Somewhat cliche, I guess...Mason sort of acted like the angel of death here, and his conversations with Ashley were somewhat corny. But this had great concentration on Ashley's thoughts and mind, and it was quick and easy to read...I also liked the newspaper thing at the end. Hm...I guess that it would be easy to say that Mason didn't really even exist, either. That he was just a piece of Ashley's mind made up to comfort her in her decision to "move on". That would explain the drippy conversations and Mason's angel-ness...pretty brilliant (even if not intentional). Lovely, inspirational piece! Also, I'm having difficulty finding typos. Props to you. 8/10
Moonlite Star 2006-04-30 ch 1,	abuseGreat story. It's pretty crazy how academics can become such an overwhelmingly part of a person's life nowadays. But I can believe it, as I'm sure I know people pulling out their hairs just to make that perfect score to get them into an Ivy. Keep writing.
uberwitch 2005-12-21 ch 1,	abuseVery talented writing. The frame work is great. I'd like to see the story allude to her mental stability a little more. The part where she said she wanted to become a butterfly is a good example of it. I think the newspaper clipping is unnecessay. You don't have to sum it up neatly for the reader. I also think it takes away from the power of the last line in the paragraph before it. Hope you don't take this as a negative review... it's a wonderfully written short story. I was just offering some thought for the revision. :)

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