AH! Wonderful last line! "i'm a !secret! **" and how you connected that with snowflakes.

the way you write is unlike anything i've ever read before.it's strange, in the best possible way.


"i have no reasons to say no : god guaranteed us redemption, anyway." - amazing.

You're brilliant.

I've read several of your pieces now, and most I can't review because I can't think of anything to say.

Speechless is a good thing.

I love this! I love all your stuff so much. I love the way you write.

I think this is painful more than beautiful, very your style. A line I really liked is 'when raindrops start to slap our cotton-covered skin', almost like it is chiding them...I love the raw emotion in your writing (know i've probably said it before but really!)

oh this is so beautiful. each word is so perfect. are you going to continue? it's gorgeous.

(but i caught the snowflakes in my mouth because kisses on the cheek are n e v e r enough, and i’m a !secret! **).i absolutely adore that line.

oh **. that's what i thought when i read that last line, sentence. this is beautiful, and heartbreaking, even though something about it feels like it's not quite supposed to be. amazing.

WOW.. have I ever mentioned I love your writing?? In particular, "Let me defile you," and "God guaranteed us redemption, anyway." And the "secret **" - I know *all* about that. This was pretty frikkin great.

interesting...that's a compliment, i promise.

Draven.

so pretty and hurting just the way the prettiest things always seem to rip at the heart. I'm not sure that sentence made sense but anyway... this makes my heart sigh.

mezzie

This glides from light images to dark images so well. You really set the reader up well for the ending to be unexpected. Good write.

the first one seems magical and gritty ( if that combination is possible ) and the second one is pure enchantment.

Orgasmic with a tinge of slutbeauty. Two beautifully written pieces; the style is perfect. The imagery is hazy and faint, just like the subjects of both. Love(ly).

Hehe love this poem it's so innocent yet not at the same time. Not sure if you meant for the formatting to be like that but love your choice of words. Keep it up!