This story definitely caught my attention. Before I decided on a music major, I considered being a criminal psychologist. Even took Abnormal Psych and all that jazz in college. You write quite well, and I love how you choose to portray Allison's "insanity" (quotes because I'm sure it's more than that). Patrick reminds me of Hannibal Lecter, very much. Calm, seemingly sane, and incredibly dangerous.

Jason's story of meeting Kim reminds me a lot of my good friend. He converted to Catholicism as an adult (after being raised atheist), and he was actually on a forum looking around on how to become a priest when he met the woman who would become his wife. Needless to say, he's not a priest (but he knows WAY more about the Bible and Roman Catholic theology than I know the Bible or Lutheran Theology... he's very smart).

I'm a great fan of horror and psychological thrillers, and I think you've done well so far to incorporate the elements of those into this story. I feel very sorry for Allison and hope that she gets "cure" and I'm in intrigued by Patrick Svahe. I definitely want to know how the session between him and Allison goes!

I'm still on the fence about Devon. I don't DISLIKE her, but I'm not sure if I like her or not. Can't put my finger on why. Hmm. I do like how dedicated she is to Allison because of her sister's death, though. It makes sense.

Anyway, I'm enjoying it!

You realy DO know how to write suspense, you know. Have you read Ted Dekker? It's almost like him, but so much better (I'm not a big fan of Ted, myself - I used to be, but his stuff has gotten slacker-ish lately).

Have you done a lot of research on mental diseases to write this story?

A few random thoughts, since I want to review this chapter even though I'm not entirely sure what to say:

I wonder if Devon's a Christian, but I don't think so.
I also wonder why they would suggest that Patrick would help... something tells me I'll find out in later chapters. =)

Hey there!

I, as well, apologize for the craziness of my reviews... I know they're way too few and far between. Busy school year. =) Anyway, I also wanted to thank you for you reviews! I've kept them in a folder and I'm going to return to them when I'm actually done writing altogether - during my editing process. =)

Anyway, you've just written too much, I can't keep track of it! But this one captured my interest, even though I know I say that all the time (perhaps it has to do with the author? I don't know, that's just any idea...)

Hm, this sounds a lot to me like spiritual warfare - have you read Frank Peretti's books, This Present Darkness & Piercing the Darkness? Perhaps I've already asked you that; I have no idea. Anyway, spiritual warfare has always been a topic that has scared me, but intrigued me all the same. But I can't help but wonder if Allison simply needs someone to pray over her...

Sigh. Like always, you've managed to make me curious. And I'm on to the next chapter...


BUT before I do that, can I ask you how you can possibly write so many different stories at one time? I mean, I'm going to have a hard time keeping up with all this stuff, much less reading what I've missed in the last six months or so.

I know you mentioned college and breaks and such, however - I can never concentrate on more than one or two projects at a time. I lose my mindset for that story because I've been proccupied with another - becuase I never really write anything down or outline.

Ohh...so Allision is finally meeting with our residant madman. Creepy.

Nitpicky:
If Devon has the guilt wrung out of her, shouldn't she then be free of guilt?

Doubting the wisdom in a possibly rash decision is not only expected, it sounds a little redundant.

Funny. I never thought about Svahe having a family.

I love this! Please continue.

Damn. Quite sadistic and disturbing but that's the way I like it. I'm not religious myself nor do I subscribe to Christianity, but I'm still willing to recognize talent when I see it. A writer and a rock star. ;-)

Thanks for the review, mate.

Another action-packed chapter, with some surprising revelations.Just one thing- how was Jason's father involved in the Church? He couldn't have been a priest, since he was married...unless I'm missing something? Otherwise, great chapter. I don't know is everyone would appriciate the conversation towards the end- a little preachy, even if it is true. But it does offer insight into the characters' religious beliefs, which might become important later on...hint-hint.

I like this story. It's nice and disturbing, like the eating her intestines part. I like your writing. I think you should try to publish some of your work.

Wow!! Man, i need to catch up on your work. I'm FINALLY back and writing again. This is great. I'm intrigued. I'm going to catch up on a bunch of writing and reading this weekend. I'll probably catch up on your stories tomorrow.

Very good! Very well written, yeah, I like it.

'...and icicle gorging her intestines'. I think you mean 'gouging'- 'gorging' means eating. Unless you mean an icicle is eating her intestines...

This is a cool story. The story is well paced and I love the suspence. The opening chapter was well written. The whole story seemed poetic with the reputition of the word 'pain'.