Really fragmented and all over the place; like a real fever dream, it skips erratically around, dancing on the edges of reason. Interesting ending. Very nice! Great style of poetry!

This is just...amazing..Keep up the good work!

Wow. Enigmatic, poetic, and just a tad insane. The last line came as a shock. I really liked this.

Wow, I really enjoyed this. The beat was a little hard to get into at first, but in my mind it was like a drum. Thanks for posting this here, it rather made my day! Happy writings!