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| alittlebitconfused 2008-05-10 ch 3,  | abuseShoot, pressed Submit Review too soon... So, here I am again. Onwards to the second chapter! Ack, I hate Shakespeare, Old English >. |
| alittlebitconfused 2008-05-10 ch 4, | abuseI love your first line, it caught my attention and gave me a nice first impression. In your prologue, you a a nice job of setting up her determination for the rest of the story. You do a nice job of setting up your scenes, and I can really picture what's happening. I love your style of writing, it's easy to read and it keeps my attention. :) Wade seems amazing, by the way. I love the sensitive type who writes poetry. Though, I think reciting Poe would be a little creepy... He was just a little... odd. One thing I loved in main character, Lieve, was the fact that she seemed so real. She's got her flaws, the whole no-guy-will-ever-break-my-heart-ever-again-and-they're-all-scum mindset, and she's so shortsighted and close-minded to any other opinion. She stereotypes them all too, which isn't very nice, but it's a very realistic human trait, which makes her so much more real. I loved that. |
| Misplaced Angel 2008-04-22 ch 4, | abusejust a note, i honestly expected more, you showed absolutely none of the hurt-scared person you were all over during the first paragraph. its like one minute 'Guys are Pigs, I am NEVER coming near one again' and the next ' OMG he is so cute, i wonder if he's taken' Where is the ' Guys are pigs'?? it was there for maybe 3 paragraphs. not enough for me to build a storyline. but other than that, if you can work on it and try not to make it seem like its really rushed, you have something good going at it would be a shame to lose it. sincerly, Angel |
| bLuEsKyBaBy 2007-05-31 ch 4, | abuseWow, this is another great story! More please! |
| DemonicDestiny 2007-03-09 ch 4, | abuseGreat story and plot. All the flashbacks and stuff makes the story interesting. Can't wait to see what'll happen. Update soon. |
| Tu Morrow 2006-07-14 ch 4, | abuseHey! Good story so far!I really like this one too! So, what's the history between Charles and Lieve? What did he do to her? I have two theories. 1. he took her virginity and then dumped her 2. he raped her or something along those lines. I don't know. You tell me. Update soon on this other fantastic story of yours!! |
| Tu Morrow 2006-07-14 ch 1, | abuseGood sentence structure and grammar & mechanics. This story has a good start and it sounds like an interesting plot. I will keep reading. You're just an overall good writer. |
| Jaede 2006-02-13 ch 4, | abusehey that was pretty good! im in suspense... |
| Marylyn-Mercy 2006-02-13 ch 4, | abuseNot bad...not bad! I'm interested in seeing where this is going...so update soon! :) -MM |
| Raven of Ice 2005-12-30 ch 3, | abuseAw...and poor Lieve. |
| Raven of Ice 2005-12-30 ch 1, | abuseGreat intro! I like it. Is she a senior in college or high school though? And whats she look like? |