Reviews for Princess of Priss

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Kayamel 2007-01-04 ch 20,	abuseThis story is great. I think the thing I like best about it is your style of writing. It's very distinct, and I feel it's very down to earth and a-matter-of-fact-ly (if that's even a word). Your characters are very realistic, and I'd say that's what I look for in a story. Your story held my interest to the last chapter! Love it (totally faving it!)
Vixen of Vienna 2006-12-17 ch 55,	abuseOh my god, K. Hahaha. Still funny.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-12-07 ch 52,	abuseO, suspenseful. A little blase description, but I am in a bad mood; so ignore this, will you? Nice though.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-11-26 ch 51, anon.	abuseHello, K. It's V.V. Too lazy to log in, but entertaining chapter. Get to the ball/masque scene. I am so happy you stepped up your editing. It was a smoother read this time around. Good job.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-11-17 ch 50,	abuseK! Hahaha. There Lesbian. Hahaha. How appropriate and thanks a billion for the review. I just added chapter three.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-29 ch 49,	abuseNaval lint. Hahaha. Well, K, the bus stops here. I am liking this story so far. I am not sure where it is going--still, but finish it. It is very funny. Hahaha. Ciao.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-29 ch 44,	abuseHahaha. Love the fountain and poetic language soon afterwards.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-29 ch 35,	abuse"If I were not mistaken ..." Subjunctive mood. Come on, K. Fix these things.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-29 ch 33,	abuse"The next weeks that followed were ..." Subject-verb agreement. Come on, K. And it is dithered, not what you had. I am forgetting now.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-29 ch 24,	abuseOh! Corporate melodrama! A little unbelievable but not outside the realm of possibility. (wink, wink)
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-29 ch 20,	abuseOkay, okay. I know it is bad form to review every chapter, but I want to have some things explained to me. Why in the heck did you name the semi-playboy Aegean? I mean it is an awesome name, very unique; but why? And keeping with that theme, you should have named his brother Ionian or Adriatic because then they would be Mediterranean seas. Get it? Yes! Hahah hehehe hahehea. Yeah ... Just ignore me. But when you go back and edit, please fix either on Valentin or Valentine. It gets kind of distracting.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-29 ch 19,	abuseHahaha. I love the coupon line. Odd little satire, but I am liking. Hahaha.
Vixen of Vienna 2006-10-21 ch 1,	abuseInteresting idea. I would love to see what happens. But you only have the first chapter up since I am not sure how I am supposed to map out the plot. But do go on. I am going to be a "floor girl" for our local L'Occitane boutique if I get the job. I think this story will make my work more humorous.
OhDarling 2006-07-26 ch 46,	abuseWow. This is definitely an improvement. It's not perfect, and it's still in the realm of vaguely cliche, but your writing style is much more sophisticated, and I don't think I spotted any spelling or grammar mistakes (in any case not nearly as many as before). The humor was good... gash. I'm actually looking forward to more (not that I wasn't before, but before, it was sort of like, "this is a cute story, I guess I'll read it" and now it's like... well, you know).
OhDarling 2006-07-01 ch 43,	abuseOne way you could make your characters better-- have them be wrong sometimes. I can understand characters thinking that they're right, but you're trying to justify that in your narration. Unless you're trying to exemplify that she's wrong, in which case you should ham it up a bit more. Just a pointer. Take it or leave it.

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