Holy **, man. That was so fricking good. Beautifully writen, especially Gabriel's emotions during the sex scene(s). Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. I loved the dialogue. You have yourself a wonderdful one of a kind sotry here. :)

Good writing, though I'm not sure why Gabriel is addressing Michael as "Sie" intead of the expected "du" even in bed. That's awfully formal. Did you intend this or did you use some weird online translator? Just wondering. It's simply not very realistic. *g*
I'm not going to comment on the national stereotyping, that's at least amusing.

i like your story..but its kinda hanging is it?..kinda just end with sex and i cant just feel satisfied ..but i like it how you've done a german accent that kinda mean that the person cant speak english that well so it believable..great story line like you infusing the ww2 with the story ..like there is 1 world divided by 2 minds..

Cute story. ^_^ A bit too short to allow the plot to properly develop, but entertaining and hot nonetheless.

O, is there more to this story? Very very goot!!

I loved this! You are super talented. :-D What a bummer there's only one chapter, though- I'd love to read more. ;-D

This one literally knocked the breath out of me. What a gorgeous spinning of words and dialogue and overwhelming personality! The accent work was very nice...I always have enjoyed the German. This is an overflowingly beautiful work.

Yeah, another good story! I love the accent work! Definately fun to read!

I really enjoyed this piece, it had me shivering with anticipationthe entire time. Your writing skills are unbelivably well done. I think of all the fp authors I've read you are the greatest.

-Bloody Doll (Syns Short Stories)

will you write more about their life? If this goes anywhere at all?

WHAT? WHAT ONE CHAPTER? ONLY ONE? come on! you ahve to write more than that... It sounds like it's written in the future almost, but not really. What does he mean by a precinct w/ second and first class citizens? It's assumed to be in Germany, But then Michael says it's in NY, so it's...confusing. Anyway. that was awesome. Perfectly descriptive, very teasing, and quite awesome. I like the characters, too. I'm assuming you realized that Michael and Gabriel (the latter being my favourite male name ever) are the names of the angels? Just checking. Anyway, please, write more, I do like this very much. Well...given the fact that it's all just eroticism, i guess, but for the plot that COULD be, I would like to see more (saying nothing about the eroticism, hehe). So...cya!

oh ** that was a great ride, i loved it.. why did it have to end? =0)

ooh, beautiful. You have no idea how much I loved it; you have an undeniable talent for creating intensity and involvement, taking the concept of "lemons" to a whole new level, somewhere in the realm of "lemon meringue pie" in comparison.This story consists of only two characters and yet you manage, in a very restricted frame of time and words, to paint a detailed picture of them -- physically, mentally, emotionally... creating unexpected depth, beauty, dragging the reader in swiftly and mercilessly. :)A powerful piece.