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brightlily
2008-05-03
ch 4,
abusethat was amazingly beautiful.
in such a tragic way.

but i love it all the same.
dark*stars*grace
2006-02-28
ch 1, anon.
abusesuch a great poem, it sounds like it could be a classic rock song. nicely done.
emmathree
2006-02-28
ch 1,
abuseThis is... to say the least, disturbing. Which any of my friends will gladly tell you is a sign of pure genius.
no.peace.los.angeles
2006-02-18
ch 4,
abuseI like the specifics of which star it was. That is cool. But once again, the suicide thing...Keep writing! :)
no.peace.los.angeles
2006-02-18
ch 3,
abuseOoh, not a big fan of the second stanza of this one. It was going well, then you brought up suicide. Yikes. That's always a risky move. But. Keep writing! :)
no.peace.los.angeles
2006-02-18
ch 2,
abuseYou bring in such random ideas, like the ice caps, but it works! That rules! I love your writing! Keep writing! :)
no.peace.los.angeles
2006-02-18
ch 1,
abuseWHOA! That was awesome! I loved it, so sexual and just yummy. Fantastic! Keep writing! :)
bread and circuses
2006-02-16
ch 4,
abuseHoly mackerel, ahh, wow, good golly, gee-whiz, take your pick 'cause they're all running through my mind. Some are R-rated versions, but still.

This? AMAZING. The peter pan chapter itself was brilliance defined but the continuation is godlike. I worship your mind for this.
Nona Lisa
2006-02-07
ch 1,
abuseSo deep, I love ur metaphors or the way u compare him! Very cooL! I will check out some more of ur work laterz but now g2g, Nona
simpleplan13
2006-01-20
ch 4,
abusewow... sad and beautiful play on the peter pan thing... i hafta say in the last chapter i thought it was wendy who committed suicide, but im easily confused
simpleplan13
2006-01-20
ch 3,
abusewow.. such a happy beginning and a sad ending.. im not sure i like it... i feel like they should be separate chapters.. i kinda want more of the happiness & more about the child, but that's just me
simpleplan13
2006-01-20
ch 2,
abusei love that last line... it kinda summed up all the fears you said she had... nice descrptions... kinda funny somewhat sad... nice job
simpleplan13
2006-01-20
ch 1,
abusei like this... very cool.. the descriptions are great... i love that second line and the glow in the dark part.. awesome
Faerie Energy
2006-01-09
ch 4,
abuseWonderful!!

I love it! Great work. Very well written.

All due respect,Faerie Energy
Sarah-Brighteyes
2006-01-01
ch 4,
abuseSo very sad...I wish I couldnt cry sometimes.

I loved this part though. You follow the imagination of peter pan through it. I think you should write a short story about this. Just a suggestion. Take the poem and create something longer... though it wouldnt make the piece any better, just a compliment is all.

Very good writing. I am glad you have some new things up. Makes me excited to come back to fictionpress. Bravo Dear citrus as always.
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