that was amazingly beautiful.

in such a tragic way.

but i love it all the same.

such a great poem, it sounds like it could be a classic rock song. nicely done.

This is... to say the least, disturbing. Which any of my friends will gladly tell you is a sign of pure genius.

I like the specifics of which star it was. That is cool. But once again, the suicide thing...Keep writing! :)

Ooh, not a big fan of the second stanza of this one. It was going well, then you brought up suicide. Yikes. That's always a risky move. But. Keep writing! :)

You bring in such random ideas, like the ice caps, but it works! That rules! I love your writing! Keep writing! :)

WHOA! That was awesome! I loved it, so sexual and just yummy. Fantastic! Keep writing! :)

Holy mackerel, ahh, wow, good golly, gee-whiz, take your pick 'cause they're all running through my mind. Some are R-rated versions, but still.

This? AMAZING. The peter pan chapter itself was brilliance defined but the continuation is godlike. I worship your mind for this.

So deep, I love ur metaphors or the way u compare him! Very cooL! I will check out some more of ur work laterz but now g2g, Nona

wow... sad and beautiful play on the peter pan thing... i hafta say in the last chapter i thought it was wendy who committed suicide, but im easily confused

wow.. such a happy beginning and a sad ending.. im not sure i like it... i feel like they should be separate chapters.. i kinda want more of the happiness & more about the child, but that's just me

i love that last line... it kinda summed up all the fears you said she had... nice descrptions... kinda funny somewhat sad... nice job

i like this... very cool.. the descriptions are great... i love that second line and the glow in the dark part.. awesome

Wonderful!

I love it! Great work. Very well written.

All due respect,Faerie Energy

So very sad...I wish I couldnt cry sometimes.

I loved this part though. You follow the imagination of peter pan through it. I think you should write a short story about this. Just a suggestion. Take the poem and create something longer... though it wouldnt make the piece any better, just a compliment is all.

Very good writing. I am glad you have some new things up. Makes me excited to come back to fictionpress. Bravo Dear citrus as always.