I must admit that I thought you were going to take a Michael Crichton or Robert J. Sawyer move in there with a cheesy love story and some villains that just would not die, but I'm glad you ended it this way.

It's a neat story in a way that you're not terribly overreaching with the scientific speculations. It's a long-winded way to end this way, though, that humanity's just not ready. I was going to make a comment about putting in more descriptions, like the tank and Athena, and explaining certain things in this universe (like the Task Force Dept--usually, "Task Force" is associated with peacekeeping and the police), but I see that this is only a novella so it's not worth your time to explicate so much.

I'm not a professional writer, but I can see that you're good at this. You still have room to improve, however. I look forward to more stories! (PS., I'm not one to gush, so don't feel down if I didn't write, "Oh, this story's so good!" and such. Consider a mature but elitist version of it done, though.)

Very interesting. I wish there was more than just dialogue, but I like the dialogue that is here.

Your newspaper is very convincing in the way it is written. You very obviously did your homework on this one. I like it.

Very interesting set up you have here. And funny setup for a layman to be caught up in.