 With Rhyme and Reason 2006-05-23 . chapter 1This is cool. I love poems that are written both for the "heaten masses" and the "glorious literati" (ourselves, of course). It could be about theatre (that's for the masses), life in general, or even just getting down from a high. Not drugs, necessarily, but rather a good feeling. For example, perhaps you're in love, and then it's over. The performance was nice, but you die at the curtain call.
Very nice job. And thanks for reviewing "Adam." I've always been more confident in my structured poetry than in my free verse poetry. I really do hate writing free verse. :) |
 simpleplan13 2006-01-21 . chapter 1Just to die atthe curtain call.. at the
I like this especially the ending.. well done |
 Plinky 2006-01-11 . chapter 1Wow, interesting poem. Don't think I've read anything like that before.
Lovely ending, again. XD |
 mizu no kokoro 2006-01-02 . chapter 1aw... makes me feel abit glowy~ good work
keep writing! |
 cornered.sensations 2006-01-02 . chapter 1I loved the last part,'Just to die at the curtain call that's finally your own', lovely work
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 a lonely september 2006-01-01 . chapter 1'And light that resideIn the stars. So sing,Wide eyed, with the night' beautiful. |
 rustupidorjustnotbright 2005-12-30 . chapter 1Sad and very pretty. |
 Niniel Uskglass 2005-12-29 . chapter 1I like "light that resides/ in the stars" I like the way you cut up your lines. I understand the feeling "too many times for the world to see". The poem is almost to simple, I think you could do more if you elaborated a bit, but I know how sometimes it feels like its finished. You have a typo in "just to die ATTHE curtain call" but I'm sure we all have those. Nice work though, being on stage is definetly a feeling I think all of us have sometimes. |
 none of burt's beeswax 2005-12-27 . chapter 1short and sweet. innocent and hopeful. i like how "your own" is its own line. |
 just a teardrop 2005-12-24 . chapter 1i love this! its amazing! *added to faves*
oh, btw, just so u know, theres a typo, 'atthe' instead of at the. (sorry, i notice things like that!) |
 button-nose 2005-12-24 . chapter 1i love this...the darkness and the light that resides in the stars...so pretty! fab x x |