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| WiwuX 2006-01-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseI like it. I'm curremtly very much into the modernism right now, and I'd say that this falls into that category very well since, the focus of the modernism is the psyche. Some formulations were a bit off, and it required a bit more evolvation. The ending statement felt as if it was just meant to sound good, which made it not sound good. I stress this now. Never, ever right a sequel to this. I feel you could use practice in writing, though. Write prequels, appropriately concerning some of her victims. Just remember that it isn't a gorily described death-sequence that we´re interested in. We want to know what leads her up to her horrible deeds. |
| NemracEnilk 2005-12-27 ch 1, | abusevery... interesting. i was still a bit confused.. whyd she kill her family and friends? plz check out some of my stuff |
| Little Kitty Fantastico 2005-12-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseGreat short story >< Misa liked a lot, it's typicall Michie style. (it is?) Way to go! Two thumbs up! XD |
| lostandwandering 2005-12-25 ch 1, | abusethat story had me completly mesmerized. i HAD to keep reading, i couldn't stop. wow. that was a powerful story with more emotion than i usually see in stories. you wrote a fantastic horror story. would you review some of my stuff? |