I can relate to unrequited. Wonderfully painful.

I don't even know what to say. This is just incredible and beautiful and I love it.

.. this is pure amazing

Ah, I really like this poem. It's very powerful. I like how you separated and silly me from the rest. A deep sentiment I feel most people share at some level or another.

"if I had you I could learn to have myself, too." wow. where do you get this stuff? this piece is perfect from beginning to end. I adore it :)

Oh my goodness. Amazing.

so pretty and human, there's a lot of strength to your writing in this one, i muchly enjoyed this, excellent job

Only one word:Powerful.

jesus christ. favourites. i'm not even going to bother to explain why. YOU ARE SUCH A GENIUS IT HURTS

Wow, that is just incredibly heartbreaking. Gorgeous, though. And in a simple way. You don't say a lot, but the feeling comes through very clearly. Great job! Keep writing! :)

It's wonderfull, really heartfelt, I can jsut imagine that I'm her lying on the floor. Great!

Wow! This is great. I love the imagery throught the poem (especially the first stanza). I love the theme and the emotions brought up, I know them all too well. Well done!

interesting ending.. nicely done

Wow...the way you use images in this poem is amaizing - the brick wall, the way you describe the goosebumps is really invoking, as well as the other decriptions that you give the character's body - the "secret slices of my eyelids" for example, it's a wonderful descriptions. I also really liked the way you keep using the word "me" or "my", as if the character is trying to vindicate herself but can't - its a strong piece, made stronger by the hidden images and tone. Keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

I was really moved by this...I think it's something a lot of people can relate to, expressed in a gentle, longing and beautiful way.