.. this is pure amazing

Ah, I really like this poem. It's very powerful. I like how you separated and silly me from the rest. A deep sentiment I feel most people share at some level or another.

"if I had you I could learn to have myself, too." wow. where do you get this stuff? this piece is perfect from beginning to end. I adore it :)

Oh my goodness. Amazing.

so pretty and human, there's a lot of strength to your writing in this one, i muchly enjoyed this, excellent job

Only one word:Powerful.

jesus christ. favourites. i'm not even going to bother to explain why. YOU ARE SUCH A GENIUS IT HURTS

Wow, that is just incredibly heartbreaking. Gorgeous, though. And in a simple way. You don't say a lot, but the feeling comes through very clearly. Great job! Keep writing! :)

It's wonderfull, really heartfelt, I can jsut imagine that I'm her lying on the floor. Great!

Wow! This is great. I love the imagery throught the poem (especially the first stanza). I love the theme and the emotions brought up, I know them all too well. Well done!

interesting ending.. nicely done

Wow...the way you use images in this poem is amaizing - the brick wall, the way you describe the goosebumps is really invoking, as well as the other decriptions that you give the character's body - the "secret slices of my eyelids" for example, it's a wonderful descriptions. I also really liked the way you keep using the word "me" or "my", as if the character is trying to vindicate herself but can't - its a strong piece, made stronger by the hidden images and tone. Keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

I was really moved by this...I think it's something a lot of people can relate to, expressed in a gentle, longing and beautiful way.

Absolutely beautiful and so true. If we are accepted and loved by others we can accept and love ourselves more easily, whoch can be agood thing but also a bad one, if that love is withdrawn again from others etc. I love the subtle undertones in this poem, for instance how in the description of the way the speaker perceives herself in the first stanza you have si undertones or imagery that shows that the speaker has a negative or ambivalent attitude towards herself (if i have read it correctly), such as "everyblade of goosebump hair" - that is such an excellent image. Great poem.

i like this. it's vague, but it gets a lot across. wonderful work. x3