I like how everything leads up to the last line. Very powerful.

interesting format, adds to the dramatic language you used, I really like it, well done.

Love,Draven

this is really good. we both know you have amazing talent when it comes to writing

your format adds to it a lot.i love it. just like the other ones.

Uh... wow. How to say this...It seems to convey a message of lonelyness, but its hard to read with all that... excess punctuation. A good poem, but I have to wonder how it would be without all those delaying periods and separating parentheses. A good poem, but does it really need all those periods?