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| Brussel Sprout! 2006-09-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow, you've done it again! I love this story. I know you showed it to me before, but I don't think I understood it until now. The way you used the perfect word choices and the way it just flowed, wow. That's all I can say, apart from I wish I could write like that! Keep writing stories that teach people so much!(By the way, you better know who I am...the name gives it away...) :] |
| Azazal 2005-12-27 ch 1,  | abuseA very nice short story. I agree with Autumn tears, you had a great opening line. Although, it seemed you were shielding yourself from possibly hurtful reviews with your description. "I like it, if you don't get it, don't worry about it. You're not supposed to" We're not that judgemental! Or perhaps you were just reasuring the reader... Either way, it was an excellent story. Even though it was quite sad. What is English 8 btw? Just general english? Thanks for sharing your story with us. -Azazal |
| Maggie Marvel 2005-12-27 ch 1, | abuseOh, wow, thanks for the reviews. To answer your question, this is in reviews because I normally don't see people with wings walking around. Even though that part can be taken as figurative language-still. It's the closest I could come. Kitten Lemonade- You got it! I'm amazed. wh00t for you. That's awesome. Even my teachers and betas didn't get in.Wraith2099- I know it was odd. XD I'm glad you like my style. That's very sweet of you.Autumn tears-Oh, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. Eh, I don't know my grade yet, but who cares. I like the story more than the teacher. XD |
| Niki Lemonade 2005-12-27 ch 1, | abusethat was interesting. i think i understand, it sounds like its about a friend that helped you become beautiful, but she herself can't become beautiful, she can only sit and smile as you go on to greater things...or maybe i'm full of crap!! anyway, love your style, ciao baby |
| aj6568422 2005-12-26 ch 1, anon. | abuseys this under fantasy? |
| Manny Terwilliger 2005-12-26 ch 1, | abuseThat was...odd, to say the least. But I liked it. As you said, I didn't exactly get it, but you have a good way of writing. I highly suggest you stick with it, and write some more stories. |
| Autumn tears 2005-12-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is a beautiful piece of fiction and I seriously hope your teacher gave you the grade you deserved for it. The opening line had me completely. The way you write is completely original, using wonderful metephors without being too abstract and hard to understand. (You know those writers who TRY to be abstract and end up being confusing and stupid? You're NOT one of them.) Lovely! |